Collapse

Sometimes there is just this block in my mind
it does not shift or fall
but just sits there..smug and pretty
defying all laws of gravity or what not
it just weaves my personal harakiri..

 Has no shape
   Has no form
throbs within tender grey cells of mine
threatening to burst some day
sprawls as a magnum malady..

Does not heal
does not cure

Piles up one over another
in stacks
  stacks
stacks
 stacks
more of it
without a crack
just sits there smug and pretty
as i witness my own colossal destruction
 i die little deaths every day..minute..second
                collapsing under the weight of my own mind..


(my mind a creature within a creature with a  mind of its own beyond my grasp)

Reviews

[Abd-afeez]

hmmm! I just love the explosiveness of this poem. I mean it seems like a revelation of how much a mind could hold, those secrets that turns into emotional outburst, how much can we control these feelings, won't we collapse? I just love how so excellently you've brought to our notice the hidden piece in our mind that could actually break down our body. That won't be odd actually since every human will have to act according to their feelings. This ofcourse could be positive or negative. In this piece it is a negative feeling and so a negative reaction too. I so much enjoy this poem, thanks for sharing.

[Emily B]

wonderful work

[Bare trees]

Reminds me of my days of deep depression which still pop-up now and then. Great word choice and overall tone. I really like this one. 100/100

[Robin]

personal harakiri , magnum malady , lines that fever the emotion of this piece , excellent portrayal of the ponderous mind ..

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the feel and the emotion in your words in this poem. I feel weaken by creatures slowing me down and leaving me with no energy.
"Has no shape
Has no form
throbs within tender grey cells of mine
threatening to burst some day
sprawls as a magnum malady.."
The language made the poem a pleasure to read. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[paul]

'collapse' - cool word
stunning poem. i'm rather speechless.
will read again and again