Alone on the dance floor

This poem is been written at the most vulnerable state, hence the rawness . So it has no structure, dint follow any poem-protocols. There is always next time fr that. Enjoy!!

Alone was I when you where by my side,

Alone I am when you are gone.

Alone was not what I signed for,

Alloy of joy and wonders they said.

Wrong where they, wronged was I,

Of all the years of dwelling amongst unbelievers,

Like a ray of sun in the cold winters,

You smiled your way to my heart,

Then tore away with spades and daggers.

All was for naught; you turned to be amongst the unbelievers,

Should have showed a sign, sigh!!

Alone I stand in the dance floor,

Searching in the dark for those beautiful eyes,

Knowing in the heart of hearts they will never return.

Gone are the days when happiness was a whole,

Gone are the days when colors were enjoyed,

Gone are the days of prettiness and blush.

Here I stand, alone outstretched on the dance floor, teary eyed, a slush.

Self infliction, pitied!

The sympathizer became the sympathy.

Wounds are healed, hallelujah metabolism,

What about the deep gash? Emotion aint no organism.

Question unanswered to where was I wrong,

Or is the question right, person wrong.

Been long lingering yet in the dance floor,

Waiting for the prince to hold and lead me on.

For I know I am abandoned, long gone is he,

For  I know I have to live with only residual memory,

Though I still stand waiting all alone on the dance floor.

Author's Note

Critique all you want, i am a sponge. I will try and rectify in my next.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed and I liked the poetry. Reminded me of old songs and wishes.
"For I know I am abandoned, long gone is he,
For I know I have to live with only residual memory,
Though I still stand waiting all alone on the dance floor."
The above lines create visions and loneliness for the reader. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Zeba Syed]

thank a lot!!!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Zeba Syed]

do read my next too..

[zainul]

You have not abondoned the hope.
That's great.
Being optimistic is the best option.
I hope the prince will hold and lead you to the dream home.
Fix the spelling errors:(for example)
when you where by my side:-where->were

[syed]

really nice zeba... way to go.. write more..

[annabellee]

"You smiled your way to my heart,

Then tore away with spades and daggers."

Great imagery and a very good, heartfelt write. I enjoyed reading it. :)