To Disappear

One, Two, Three, Four, 

Why didn't I think about this before? 

Five, Six, Seven, Eight, 

I hope somebody finds me too late. 

Nine, Ten, Eleven, Twelve,

I wonder where I'll go, Heaven or Hell?

Thirteen, Fourteen, Fifteen, Sixteen, 

I want to go somewhere I'm never seen. 

Seventeen, Eighteen, Nineteen, Twenty, 

I hate myself, I don't want to be me, 

Not long now, not many more... 

Can close my eyes and shut all the doors!

Reviews

[Acucena G.]

21,22,23 you set us free lol, well written

[Zoe Marie Ross]

Thank you, I like your ending :)

[Acucena G.]

hahahah my pleasure

[Prritiy]

O nice one, and you taught me counting too :)
liked it.

[Zoe Marie Ross]

Haha, good job you read this poem then! :P Glad you liked it.

[Prritiy]

:)

[minnie:)]

This is really good :) wonderfully written loved it :)

[Zoe Marie Ross]

Thank you very much :)

[Surbhi Khandelwal]

Beautifully conveyed....i like it :)

[Zoe Marie Ross]

Thank you :)

[Riley Bray]

After the last line in the last stanza and on, there were either too many syllables or bot enough to balance it out, I still very much liked the poem though, nice write!

[Zoe Marie Ross]

I am glad you liked the poem, thank you for your helpful critism, I may have another look and see if I can change anything.

[Riley Bray]

Alright, soundsgood. :D

[Krisma Marie King]

This was really good, kind of gave me the shivers.

[Zoe Marie Ross]

Thank you :) how come you got the shivers?

[Krisma Marie King]

I'm not sure, I think because I think it's about someone committing suicide and thats a shiver kind of topic and you wrote it well :)

[Zoe Marie Ross]

Yes, it is about someone committing suicide, thank you :)