Hiding Place

What happened mum? 

Why is my home like this?

All I feel is numb...

Everything of ours smashed, but his. 

I begin to help clean, 

Black bin liners, our possessions,

Its the worst I've ever seen, 

I feel anger and pain. New sensations. 

I urge mum to call the police, 

It wont happen again, she says, 

Why does she think he means peace? 

Can she not see all this mess? 

He buys new things, replacing memories, 

Nothing can erase the emotional pain,

The smiles, the laughter, hiding the miseries, 

When mum is alone, tears fall like rain. 

She isn't happy and neither am I, 

We'll end up running away again, 

He'll say jump, she'll say how high, 

And I'll be hiding in my den!

Reviews

[Prritiy]

A touching out-pour of heart it seems, you have written this piece very nicely.

[NITHIN PURPLE]

good one!!

[Zoe Marie Ross]

Thank you :)

[Riley Bray]

This was a very good poem and I liked very much how emotional and easy to understand it was. I felt almost as if she were me. Very good job!

[Zoe Marie Ross]

Thank you very much, I am glad it makes the reader feel as if it were them, but in reality, I wish it upon no-one.

[Riley Bray]

Yes, well, the power of words strike again, eh? Haha.

[minnie:)]

This is a very good poem, emotional as well. Makes the reader feel like it's kind of happened to them.
AMAZING POEM:) LOVED IT

[Zoe Marie Ross]

Thank you for your review! I am glad you liked it, and felt the emotions. :)

[minnie:)]

You should turn this poem into a story, it would really drag in the readers :)

[Zoe Marie Ross]

I have written a short story, called 'Home Front', which is related to this poem. If you have a chance to read it, you may think this poem could have been written by the character, Melissa. :)

[minnie:)]

Really? would you mind sending me a read request?

[Zoe Marie Ross]

Of course :) Thank you

[minnie:)]

thanks :)

[Zoe Marie Ross]

All sent :)

[minnie:)]

okay, thanks again. I'll read it when I can :)