Winter cold

a girl tries to understand herself on a cold winter day.

The air was fresh with crisp chills squeezing my cheeks to ruby red. It tried to twist my hair but all it did was get the ginger strands stuck to my raspberry lip gloss I borrowed from my sister. For sure she will be upset but I like to feel as if I am older, or more 'mature' as my mom would so dearly put it. She said I was a sophisticated young lady and the world was way ready for me. All I had to do was welcome it into my arms. I didn't.

I tried to stray away from the crowds of bubbly girls, and choose to seclude myself and nurture my inner self in learning and reading. Its as if I don't exist. I become evanescence into the millions of star dust sparkling out in an indigo ocean. At least in my minds eye, I am.

Today on this frosty morning I look up and I see endless white, and the star dust is falling and melting against my skin, and I feel as if maybe I should give chance to the world. maybe. I wish people could understand my ability and maybe experience the ability to be like I am. Them being stuck in the secluded realm of superficial beliefs, but maybe being scared is good? I mean that's what causes it all right? I blow a little snowflake off of my gray mittens. It twinkles then fades into the frosted gravel. Maybe that's what makes us humans so special...being afraid, being so paranoid as  too create a civilization of absolute order. 

We make stupid mistakes for sure, but never learn. Is life an endless loop? a roll of film repeating? I want to know, but I know that want is not always fulfilled. I feel like I know too  much. I can hang out with people older then me to understand anyone, and that group has to have my vocabulary level. 

If I the world was a virtual multi-player game-my emoticon would be forever sighing. 

I walk back into the suffocating warmth of my house. Greet the smell of hot cocoa. Then nap time. 'night.

Author's Note

I was really bored and came up with whatever was going on in my head.
*Trigorin-I edited the piece to fit the sophistication of the point of view.

Reviews

[Trigorin]

Not bad, and while there really isn't any direction for the piece, you've still expressed the narrator's feelings and reactions fairly well. One note - depending on how young the narrator is supposed to be, you might want to consider writing this a little simpler than it currently is. Young children don't often know as many big words as are presented here, but that's really dependent on age. Either way, well done.

[ScintellaCadence]

I will most definitely take your advice. I wan't to make my writing as well done as possible. I am actually in middle school and I haven't really written as much as I would like to.

[lovewar]

Well who ever you are you are a beautiful writer and usally when you have a beautiful mind you have a beautiful heart

[ScintellaCadence]

thank you very much!