A Kind

We were a kind, once upon a time.

We were a kind.

You and I made a species:

we walked roofs in perfect imbalance.

Together, we were a new kind of story.

A legend, a romance.

We made a statement.

We walked by flowers and made for them

a new scent.

We recreated locales, we made a fresh act,

we created a sensuous strange.

You and I made a new class.

We were a kind.

We were.

Reviews

[Buddhistboy73]

I really loved this piece of writing. "We walked roofs in perfect imbalance".....great line! Yes, this really conjures up images for me, leading me into my emotions. "We walked by flowers and made for them a new scent".....another beautiful line....:)
And i love the ending too.....bittersweet.........

[RachelReaper]

I thought that this poem was seriously amazing.

[Coyote Poetry]

This flowed like music. I like the feel and the emotion in the words. The lines were strong and the story very good. The ending made this poem perfect and complete. This is a outstanding poem. "We were a kind. We were."
Coyote

[GunMetal]

Magnificent.
"we created a sensuous strange."
This piece is naturally perfect.

[Aekmy]

Too true. Too true.
'We were' explains everything all too well.
Great job.

[Henry Daube]

this is a poem of some sort of wonderful kind my dear

i really mean that

[Stephen Scaggs]

Dear Writer,

A review for a review? I guess. Thanks for your review on Light Burst. ^_^; Though this poem does not have any structure aside from the indent comprising "We were a kind." Don't get me wrong, it's genius. ^_^; Since you used were instead of are, I'm assuming something happened recently or sorta-recently that happened to you.

This actually reminds me of lyrical versions of a band known as Postal Service. I really did like it a lot. Thanks for accepting my friend request. It's nice meeting your acquaintance. ^_^; 9.7/10.

A friend, a poet, a person,
S. W. Scaggs

[Deder Bonner]

Oddly enough, I believe my favorite line is the last one: "We were." Obviously the twelve lines before it carried greater symbolism, more vivid imagery, and potent word usage, but ... if that last line was intended the way it sounded in my mind, then those two words carry as much significance as all the others preceding it.

The lines before paint such an amazing picture of cascading romance and a story of two souls intertwining together, but the last line seems to emphasize that it's no more. It's past tense and from our "once upon a time" that was "a long, long time ago" ... It's like ending a song with a chord whose last note doesn't quite resolve but still shimmers with all its beauty; it just resonates for an eternity, leaving the reader to gently land from the flight of your poem and walk away in a semi-daze.

You deliver quite a package of beauty and of power. Well done...

[Adelia Alighieri]

Reminds me of how strangely people find their soulmates..
Pretty use of words. Hi5! =)

[Antonio Valentino]

Cece, I really liked this. You're style is very unique.

Wonderful job!
Antonio