Empire of Ashes

..the gloom that consumes..

Do you feel tired.. by the constant reminder?

Because I have become exhausted, by lacking a feeling of desire.. 

Do you feel weighed down by the notion?

The constant despondent feeling that burns like fire.. 

Do you curse death and perplexed by life?

I dont wish for a conclusion merely to retire.. 

Do you feel gloom with every constant reminder?

The feeling that consumes, making ashes out of an empire. 

Reviews

[April Child]

"Do you feel tired.. by the constant reminder?
Because I have become exhausted, by lacking a feeling of desire.. "

Brilliant!

[Irfan Shah]

Nice imagery.. I like the title very much 'empire of ashes'
such aprofound phrase!

[Sunflower 20]

this flows wonderfuly! really enjoyed it :)

[Branch Isole]

Many pivotal emotions and actions here which might be the first stanza core of a longer ride.

[.......]

Loved the flow and amazing rhyme scheme.
This is amazing!

[Kenneth The Poet]

Yeah, being through hell can breed beautiful prose.

[Mary]

i like this one its a beautiful depiction of hopeless situation.

[Misty Blue Eyes]

the rhyme is oustanding and it made the poem that much better to read. very nice

[OT]

very nice - a strong diphthong rhyme going on which adds to the words - a hard hitting piece indeed! nice!