Fear Arrives With Reality

..remembered for being something more..

My eyes bleed 
Inside death is overtaking me 
And I'm scared, really afraid 
I cannot yet depart to my grave 
My heart beats 
With an urgency that leads to sleep 
And I cry from pain of pondering 
On my possible demise 
And I find myself surprised 
That with all the cries for death 
In the end all that is left 
Is fear... 
Fear of falling to sheol 
Fear of the ultimate seal 
And with every struggle of breath 
That is forced from my chest 
My sadness is great, for I fear... 
That soon I will perish 

I fear I hold a broken heart... 

 

Reviews

[Derek S.Keck]

First off, let me just say hearing your voice recite your poem really drug me in as a reader, and it helped me appreciate the rhythm of your writing. You really spoke the volumes of what it's like to suffer from a broken heart. Your line "I cannot yet depart to my grave" instantly made me think of Frosts, Stopping by the Woods on a Snowy Evening. Where in that last verse he alludes to wanting death to come, but knowing it wasn't yet his time. Only you take it to a totally different place, and apply it to a totally different context. You make that feeling so easy to relate to, and I love you reference to Sheol, the Hebrew hell/abyss. That’s so fitting, that allusion to that unfathomable madness of depression. Excellent write!

[Jess Quna]

I could kind of feel the fear when I heard and read this...
It's a great poem and understandably too.
Greetings
Sarah

[Sel Whiteley]

Powerful and emotive!

[Alicia Schroeder]

Amazingly written peice. Fear does beat through like empty breaths, i love this write.

[Maureen Mwaniki]

I love the raw emotion on it...and the title is so fitting!the poem takes u from the reality of death the knowing that death is almost here to the fear of the same!
Its awesome,a thrilling read!

[Cassandra D.]

(Thanks for you Review!!)

I found this a very emotional piece. I loved the ending of this poem. Amazing job.

[Hello, Goodbye]

@Ben Taylor I understand what you mean about 'really'.. I did write it to sound the way you put it.. unpoetical.. it is the expression of the feeling, and at times when we are speaking out of pain, our words come out rather infantile and spontaneous, even when it doesn't deliver as well poetically. I wrote this in one momentary burst of actual pain, so keeping the phrase 'really afraid' was needed because I wanted to keep it as candid as possible. Thanks for the review and read, I appreciate it.

[Ben Taylor]

Nice emotion. This is a beautiful heart wrenching piece.
As a side note, however, I always feel that "really" is an extremely unpoetic word; it just feels too casual. Personal opinion.
But that really doesn't detract from the poem at all :)

[Ladysue]

wow, this was moving. You penned this and read this with great emotion from deep inside...nicely done