Look through my eyes so you can see, The pain that dwells inside of me. The pain that shreds and rips apart, The fabrics of joy within my heart.
Look through my eyes so you can see, The open wounds inside of me. A soul that echoes, recollections of pain, Vibrations of anguish that enduringly drain.
Look through my eyes so you can feel, The residual ache that is much too real. The progressive sorrow that haunts my heart. A hurting that has extinguished a once luminous spark.
First off, I love the rhyming scheme. I know exactly how you feel which I believe is the purpose of poems like these, so that people can understand you when it seems like no one does. If that's an incorrect interpretation then I apologize, but that's the way I see it. I really liked it.
Full of honesty and.... well reality. Talking about looking inside a person, to see their true selves. To look beyond the exterior and really get to know a heart, and see there ugly side, as well as beautiful.... Perfectly written.
First off, I love the rhyming scheme. I know exactly how you feel which I believe is the purpose of poems like these, so that people can understand you when it seems like no one does. If that's an incorrect interpretation then I apologize, but that's the way I see it. I really liked it.
Spectacular poem, loved the rhyme... Wonderful, heart-felt description, " look into my eyes " is very nice since eyes are the mirror the reflects what's going inside your heart... Great job, a big 100 for this.