A Date with Destiny

The girl with blue eyes
squats in the shadows.
A concrete-honed switchblade
winks prettily
from out of the gloom.
The thin blade screams
for you to come closer.
She'll be elbow deep
in your guts
by the time
you've opened your mouth.

Reviews

[Gaia Octavia]

Imagery as vivid and haunting as any dream. I tip my cap.

[Zugzwang]

Thanks Gaia.
Just another of my dream poems. It seems eyes feature frequently in them. Don't know why.

[Gaia Octavia]

Eyes are where people's demons can't hide
🙂

[Zugzwang]

That would explain why they freak me out so much. Lol.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Reads like poetic antidote warning to – keep out of the shadows! Interesting and haunting write … :-)

[Zugzwang]

Or to stay away from blue-eyed girls :)

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Now there's a challenge .... !!!!!!!!

[apennylate]

The girl with blue eyes squats in the shadows... Winks, but screams and elbows you in the guts... No time for mouth... Enjoyed the fact you start with prettiness, but throw in words like "squat" and "guts" to throw the whole thing for a loop... Can not settle on one feeling, and I think... I think that in the scenario of being knifed in the gut... I would not know what to think... Concretely penned...

[Zugzwang]

Yeah, it's a weird poem all right.
I have a couple of others similar to it also. They all come from a dream I had and remember vividly. It was not a nice dream lol.

[apennylate]

Well... Sometimes not-nice dreams can make the nicest of things to write about, heh...

[Zugzwang]

Yeah, I find it interesting to write about that stuff.