The Eyes Have It

Fabric,

Worn to the point of

Translucency,

Shows its weave,

Like a gossamer skeleton.

 

These empty eyes

Languish, in a

Thousand yard stare-

Inward gazing,

But always

Elsewhere.

Reviews

[Autumn Lyric]

always gazing inward for a thousand miles, in my case. :) taking in the external view through the physical eye in order to gain understanding for our internal eye; giving what is intangible or abstract, a solidity and grounding. such a muse brings forth amazing results (and inspires others) as in this work you have written..thank you so much for sharing! LHh

(the eyes have it)

[Zugzwang]

Thank you so much for your insights and comment. It's always interesting to see the world through others' eyes through poetry.

[Willard Wells]

Very nice word selection and use. Great imagery causing many memories to flash in my mind. Again short verse and I like it. Thanks,

[Zugzwang]

Yar, I tend to write pretty short ones.
I'll have to take a look at your stuff when I get a bit of time.
Thanks for the comment.

[Firebird]

I really like this. The thousand yard stare is something I can really relate to.

[Zugzwang]

Yes, I think I have a thousand yard stare right now. :)

[Firebird]

Haha! Enjoy!

[terry smith]

this is my favorite thing you have written...i love it...great writing!!!!

[Zugzwang]

Thank you very much for your comments, Terry. Much appreciated!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

how strong is our constitution...our real faith in ourselves when we fail...easy to blame others, to gaze elsewhere.

j.

[Zugzwang]

Much harder to take responsibility for our actions and face the truth. Very true. Thank you very much for your comment, Jacob.

[DirectTangent]

Marvelous piece. Bravo!
Acoustic's comment influenced, by expanding, my read on your piece the second time through.

Some garments are worn to a threadbare state because there may be nothing else to don. Other garments may be worn thin because they are the more comfortable, even though there may be other similar garments hanging in the closet. So, too, with our own experiences.

Additionally, those who may have had to don certain life experiences may be able to appreciate beauty in a way that others, who did not have the wearing of such things, cannot.

Great write, Z.

[Zugzwang]

Thanks, Tangent!
This poem was just my attempt to articulate a sense of feeling particularly worn out and dissatisfied.
I have read with interest and appreciation the insights that others have taken away from the poem.
It certainly is true that we view the world and our experiences in it through the particular prism of our life history and experiences. So beauty in that sense is in the eye of the beholder, isn't it?
Thank you so much for the thoughtful comment, I enjoyed ruminating over it.

[alifeacoustic]

Inward gazing, but always elsewhere...superb. Maybe the fabric of who we are has stretched and faded over the years, showing too much of the bits we wish hidden, but its still holding, for now. Its sometimes that thousand yard stare that sees the beauty other eyes miss.

[Zugzwang]

Hmmmm. I just had a little ponder over your comment. It was very pleasant, I have to say....yes, I am inclined to agree. It's great that other people bring viewpoints to aspects of your writing that you hadn't thought of. Thank you for the thoughtful and incisive review!

[alifeacoustic]

You are very welcome