Pirouette

Your tongue is thirst
taking up all my need
whirling  me into place
a tidy shape, contained.

All the screams
begging to be breathed out
read aloud
sex, scripture, repeat.

Where is our eternal season;
our endless words?
I would lay down
and let you
make me be.

Where
I am water.
Please.
You are.

 

Reviews

[Kes]

"sex, scripture, repeat."

I love that line so much. :) I love the whole poem, it's pretty dark in a sweet kind of way.
Wow, that sounded condescending...
I just mean, it's pretty, while it's painful. I like it. Let's just leave it there, before I dig myself a deeper hole!
Keep up the great work!
K

[akihsna]

This is the exact kind of poetry which instantly sets one in the mood!
Really, an amazing one.
Anything and everything has been said in just a few but powerful words.
Great read, thanks for sharing! :)

[ZeeArsonist]

WOW! Thanks for such a great response to this piece! I am glad you found your way into this poem and left me some feedback! I'm excited to check out some of your work as well! Thanks, again!

[Everett DeValle]

I am water too...Wow, this is poetry...real writing here, from the soul...I miss reading writing like this...just gritty, yet it fills the senses...I'm always in awe, when I come across poetry like this...thank you for sharing.

[no sun]

love the last stanza. drink me away is all i can think when i read that. excellent write

[J.P. Bristow]

this is wonderous......lovely--decadent. Yes indeed a wonderful write.

[Naomi Montana Walsh]

All the screams
begging to be breathed out
read aloud
sex, scripture, repeat.

This is a great line..I think this poem actually has the feel of a pirouette. it spirals very quick and and pointed you might say.. anyhow I liked it

[A Touch of Insanity:)]

Very interesting, I saw the name and I had to read it....

[Exotic Topics]

Very nice. Short- to the point sort of thing. The last part seems out of place a little and I'm not sure how it adds in.

[Hello, Goodbye]

This is curiously interesting.. makes me think..