Don't Close your Eyes

She has another lover, he has a broken heart

I want to make love to you tonight.
I want to feel like you still love me,
One more time.
I need to ask a favor.
Just for me,
Will you please ?

Don't close your eyes.
I know that when you close your eyes.
You probably think of him.
Don't close your eyes.

When we make Love,
I need to feel like,
I'm the only one.
Even if you know,
That it's not true.

When your arms are wrapped,
Around me.
Holding each other,
In the night.
Give me that moment,
Make me believe.
It's only me on your mind.
Everything will be alright.

Don't close your eyes.
Please don't think of him.
When your making love to me.
Don't close your eyes
U
Please just give me one more time..
Let me have tonight.
Tomorrow, if it's him you want,
I'll know our loves not right.

I'll say goodbye.
Close my eyes and,
Walk away from you.

Author's Note

Moments floating on words

Reviews

[Aswin R Prasad]

Great poem again sir.. Although there are some simple typo errors, i really enjoyed it!
Like the "goodvye" in the last stanza .. and the "loves" in the second last one .. (love's) (Only if you prefer punctuations over emotions.. I guess it doesn't really matter..but just saying) ;)

Keep writing :)

[Greg Agee]

It matters, literally as I edit muy keyboard as making up words. Cutting and pastimg and really crazy stuff. I had to write some code to control it..Thank you, I'm always up for pointers. Thank You

[Greg Agee]

I had to do a rewrite as I confused edit doing it on my phone, lol. Thank You as you are the first one to point it out. Thanks brother

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'Don't close your eyes'
Greg Agee,
If a person has to work this hard to keep another in their life it is not good. You both are needing to make a new start. Such a process of life is painful but time will be the platform of forward motion. Honest little story which many can empathize with.
Blessings,
Kathy

[Coyote Poetry]

Strong words and emotions in the poetry.
"Don't close your eyes.
Please don't think of him.
When your making love to me.
Don't close your eyes "
I like the need and the honest tone of the words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Mary Helda]

Heart-wrenching piece.... it broke my heart and yet it's really amazing...great way of laying down that forbidden kind of love...bravo!!

[Greg Agee]

I appreciate your time and so glad you enjoyed it

[CiNtsaLis]

*covers mouth* Ahhhhhhh!! This is AMAAAZZIING!!! *nodding head excitedly* this is a beautiful kind of PAIN *nodding head- smiling* (: *Exhales* so sweet..

[Greg Agee]

Thanks for taking the time my friend. I shall return the favor. Smiles !!

[CiNtsaLis]

*softly chuckling* Actually, You don't have to. *whispers* I'm not really active (anymore) *nodding head* (:

[Greg Agee]

Thanks for reading mine !

[Troy Henson]

So many emotions in this. Love is hard especially when not reciprocated....it might be there but just not enough and this hurts. The hope is there and hinging just one last night.

Very well done

[Greg Agee]

Thank you so much.error on my last forced a rewrite. Thanks again

[Kaliope]

It's a lovely poem. The sadness, the hope, the naivete as well, thinking that one night might fix a relationship. So beautifully human!

[Greg Agee]

Thank you so much error on my last forced a rewrite. Thanks again

[idiotproof--1]

thank you for sharing. This poem is really great. I enjoyed reading it. At the end you wrote "Goodvye" instead of "Goodbye" and after "I need to" and "Close" there shouldn't be periods but otherwise this poem is really good.

[Paul]

The lover wants her to free her.but not tonight. You may call him selfish. But that's what love is sometimes. A beautiful poem sir.

[Greg Agee]

Thanks Paul, I appreciate you, Sir.The lover still had hope that he can win get over.If not. This will be his closure

[Paul]

The pleasure's all mine sir. N you put me to shame by referring to me as 'sir'. I am in my early twenties. Still a long way to go before i can be referred to as 'sir'.:)

[Greg Agee]

I'm a Martial Arts Master, we speak to everyman as they might speak to us. Sir, being a sign of respect not she. I.call 2 y/o's sir. I do get it though. Just a habit ( : Peace

[Paul]

I understand sir.:)