Fallen

This is a song that I have just written. P.S. have never written a song before

I've fallen,

Free into your arms,

I've fallen,
Sound the alarms,

You've caught my eye,
Now I'm ready to fly,
Your love passes me by,
I've fallen.....for you,

I've fallen,
Free into your heart

Ready or not,

I've fallen,
Now I can't stop,

I've caught your eye,
Now I'm ready to fly,
My love passes you by,
I've fallen
for you,

Hold on,

Don't let go,
I'll be waiting for you,
Having fallen,

I've got nothing to lose,
But you.

I've fallen,
Free into you arms,

I've fallen,
Sound the alarms,

You caught my eye,
now I'm ready to fly,
Your love won't pass me by,
I've fallen
for you,

I've fallen for you,
ooh....ooh
I've fallen for you.

Reviews

[Danielle E Lynn]

On the eighth line I think the first word should be I've, not I'll. On the twenty-sixth line it should be I'm not I. I think it is very nice overall. I can not be a judge for music as I am not that into music but towards the end I could picture someone singing it. it was cute.

[Rochelle]

Thanks for the input

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice flow of words. You led the reader to a very good ending. Good to free-fall into love. When we are free of fear and walls. Love can grow wild and free. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Ana D S M]

Very cool! You did a fine job. :)

[Rochelle]

first song I have written so please comment truthfully, thanks :)