Our world

I see a Place full of love,

A memory filled with passion,

The memory's fade as bullets are shot,

A world in war that rages on,

Children lay on the floor face down shivering in fear,

Bombs go off as they scream,

A peaceful place no longer exists,

A home Burning in flames,

A world once full of happiness,

Has now lost it's light,

We pray for our God to shine no our shadows,

But God has never seen shadows so dark,

I wish the place we once new,

Was just a step away,

A flame that will burn and never fade,

The light with a greater meaning determine to shine,

Living a life without greater meaning,

Destine to change it all,

Makes you see people getting weaker,

From the war that will never fall,

With my head held high,

As I show them strength,

Giving all I have to the land,

Just one wish to fix it all, 

A light shines if thou it seemed to show life,

I hear birds,  people cheering,

My wish was not for me to spar,

But for our world that we all share,

Reviews

[Hibiki]

Congratulation for winning in the contest~!

Well, I like this pretty much...

"Children lay on the floor face down shivering in fear,
Bombs go off as they scream,
A peaceful place no longer exists,
A home Burning in flames,

A world once full of happiness,
Has now lost it's light,
We pray for our God to shine no our shadows,
But God has never seen shadows so dark,"

How I like your idea n how you write it

Great ^^

[Rochelle]

thank you very much

[Kelechi Awoms]

I loved this line- we pray for God to shine on our shadows but God has never seen shadows so dark
You write way better than your age. I loved it
Keep it up

[Rochelle]

Thanks it means a lot

[Rochelle]

Review please it would make my day