A Sonnet

A love sonnet

My love, your Doric columns cannot bear

The massive temple of my wounded heart.

So be it worth with sinking in despair

Or swoon, down-razed before love’s poisoned dart?

Does love’s sweet worth reside in bitter tears?

Does sorrow ache within the sweetest breath?

If such proves so, must I traverse my years

In search of light in dark, of life in death?

What hope presents its shade in such a sore,

But that which time can’t from my heart erase?

If my sweet love proves not else but a chore,

Must I then keep her solely for her face?

    No, let love’s Doric columns all give way

    And down collapse and rot in their decay

    

Reviews

[just Penny]

I think Traditional sonnets are my absolute favorites and you have written a beautiful one right here. Nice use of Doric columns and I imagined the biblical tale of Samson poised between two of them, ready to push and let it all come tumbling down. "What hope presents its shade in such a sore" just aches with despondency. I enjoyed reading this. Penny

[Alfred Kukitz]

Scholarly with a pointed hue toward opposites.

[Reyvrex Questor Reyes]

A worthy sonnet, poet friend. The elements of contradiction and paradox lent striking hues for a colorful
monologue. Among the sonnet's remarkable features is the witty rhetoric.

[Gleb Zavlanov]

Thank you.

[Shaquana Adams]

But that which time can’t from my heart erase?
If my sweet love proves not else but a chore,
Must I then keep her solely for her face?

This is such a lovely sonnet! Great work Gleb!
-QuanaWana

[Gleb Zavlanov]

Thank you very much.

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Beautiful Sonnet very nicely penned.


Thank you for sharing this Lovely piece.


Blessings. kindred poet

[Gleb Zavlanov]

Thank you.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

You're very welcome. it's my pleasure always. Blessings. kindred poet

[Calissa Knox]

Here are some critiques I thought of: "Admit with shame that shame cannot lie", and "But change your ways, so I can make my mind!"

Your writing is very concise and full of emotion. Great sonnet!

[Gleb Zavlanov]

Thank you very much for the critique. The reason I wrote "Admit with shame that shame can't even lie," was to keep in touch with the meter. The other suggestion seems to sound better than the original. Thank you.

[Calissa Knox]

That makes sense, now that you mention it. You're very welcome, Gleb!