On Parting

A poem about broken love

I feel the beatings of your heart

    Strive towards me with steel-bound love,

And though as now we are apart

   I can’t love you more than enough.

 

You are to me my bonnie lass,

    And all my darkest woes expressed

Can ne’er outnumber all in past

    Our joint-found years now put to rest.

 

I see tears from your eyes like brine

    Fall down your cold and withered cheek.

No words roll off the tongue of mine

    If only hearts and souls could speak.

 

I would say what could find my heart

    In fairest prose or poetry.

What pity now that we’re apart,

    For you meant the whole world to me.

Reviews

[Brittany Zedalis]

This is very emotional and beautiful. Really good job.

[Gleb Zavlanov]

Thank you for your kind words.

[Ahena MK]

I see tears from your eyes like brine
Fall down your cold and withered cheek.
No words roll off the tongue of mine
If only hearts and souls could speak.
really really really good !!

[Gleb Zavlanov]

Thank you very much.

[Raymond Federle]

Not sure if I should use Irish or a Scottish accent while reading this....so I read it twice and used both. It sounded AWESOME! Well done my friend! :)

[Gleb Zavlanov]

Both probably did sound superb. Thanks for stopping by.

[Giggling Star]

Nice write Gleb. But I'm a sucker for lost love poems ... I identify with all the feelings.

[Gleb Zavlanov]

Thank you. Lost feelings are hard to cope with.

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Good try.. Keep sharing..!!

Good Wishes!!

[Gleb Zavlanov]

Thank you.

[MsJewel]

Sad, yet beautiful. Your writing always takes me to another place...as if a dream...
Stunning poetry my friend

:) Julie

[Gleb Zavlanov]

Thank you.

[A. Amos]

I always learn something new while reading your work, always interesting thank you my friend

[Gleb Zavlanov]

Thank you.

[Adam Whitworth]

There is something oddly unsatisfying about these words, as if a machine is mimicing a human-written poem. I absolutely don't believe in it, can't accept it at face value and I wonder what game was being played to get such words written.

[Gleb Zavlanov]

How is it perceived that way?

[wordwarrior]

Oh how sad, but your words still made me sigh with their beauty. It's an all round wonderful poem(even if sad)
Love it!

[Jack...]

So very sad my friend. To lose someone you love can be devastating. It is a pain that lingers, gripping our very core. Nicely penned.