a meditation on the inhalation of dust

a meditation on the inhalation of dust

A Poem by Zatoichi
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5 syllables too many

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After art class,

where I talk with colored chalk,

I walk home,

where I blow rainbows from my nose.

© 2016 Zatoichi


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Oh yes! I remember the chalk and board days very well, with each sneeze after the collected dust flies off from itchy nostrils. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I wanna eat your boogers that are clearly made out of skittles.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sounds like a beautiful scene after a day of class, even though it caused a sneeze or two.

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

If you are an artistic walker you know how much this means

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

just so long's you blow 'em pretty.

... brilliant, btw. gets me wondering what it is i've been breathing all day, and what comes out in inadvertent exhales... pretty sure it ain't rainbows.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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. wow! ... that's the awesomest nose in the cafe ... it can sniff out the sublime ... and the surreal ... and even say so ... amazed i am ... p.s. ... the comma would help i think ...

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really think this is my favorite of everything you've written.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This poem is really cool. I like it a lot. Art Class is so much fun.
I love how you described something that is disturbing to some
people..lol...and made it a beauty.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is spectacular.. so sharp and witty..

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I absolutely absolutely love this it is so so perfect and adorable and funny. It makes me grin every time I read it, never gets old.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Zatoichi

Laguna Niguel, CA



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