escape is possible

silence is assertive, it demands your attention

noise fills life the way debris becomes landscape

but silence is without pretension

to any concern for you, and escape is possible

with silence

in silence.

Reviews

[Libby McKeown]

So here's my suggestion. (from your message three weeks ago, better late than. . .)

SILENCE is [assertive]

Demanding,
commanding your attention
noise F
I
L
L
S
Life
the way DEBRIS becomes
Landscape

But Silence is without
pretension
to any concern
for you

Escape is possible
[for you]
with silence



in silence.


Something like that maybe. Just toying with your wrods, hope you don't mind, Maestro.

[Libby McKeown]

"Fills" is supposed to fall diagonally, but the review box wouldn't let me enter that way.

[Zatoichi]

I had a similar idea; I had the same problem as well, hence the form in which it remains.

[Libby McKeown]

I like the message, but I think it's missing something essential. I don't think the words themselves need work, I think the actually structure of the poem needs some fine tuning. Maybe rework the spacing? A mere suggestion. Thanks again for a fundamentally great piece!

[Emily B]

silence is one of my favorite things . . . I'm still trying to tech my youngest that we don't have to rattle on all the time . . . not having much luck though

[Emily B]

where are you getting these wonderful poems . . . I swear I thought I had found all your hidden treasures

[Chloe Madison Taylor.]

nice observation. The end is a bit over my head, it'll click eventually.

[Hedra Helix]

without billboards and tv our minds would be free
we could throw our arms upward
await the soft crash of
evolution.

color noise locks us in standstill
and our spinning brains rust

[Jim Bob]

Very well written....extremely minimalist, but there's not too much one can say about silence is there? - it kind of defeats the purpose. I won't say too much here - it's all just noise, and I don't want to disturb the peace of your blog! =P