Haiku Collection 2

Softer this time, more serious.

Poetrish

Poetry is prose

Vernacular of the heart

Universal tongue

 

Why?

Why do we do this,

Subjecting ourselves to pain,

better not to feel?

 

Forget

If I turn away,

and I never see your face,

Will I then forget?

 

Thoughts

When you lie awake

Am I ever in your thoughts

Crossing through your mind

 

Understanding

Do you understand

The feelings I have for you

No longer hidden

 

Revelation

What made me do it

Unveil my inner being

Take off my armour

 

Unchanging

The seasons pass by,

My feelings refuse to change,

What am I to do?

Author's Note

Rate individual haiku as well as the collection as a whole please

Reviews

[T. F. Rice]

syke,

I like the last two the best. And the second one,too.

A unique offering, this series of Haiku. Thanks for submitting to The Other Herald's Contest; your series above was right up there with the final few. I wanted to say so because I admire the layout, and your adherence to form, and I am only able to give a certain # of HM's. I agree that the individual pieces of the series should also stand along; some of these seem to mean more as a series and not so much alone. Another thought, have you considered putting the series together without the titles. They might be distracting; I dont know. It is just a thought> to try for your own fun; I am not suggesting you change it here, if you like it as it is!!

I find form difficult in my own writing. As I said, the last two are the strongest of the whole series "#2". If I get some more time, I will take a look at your others. I am always limited by my available time, working full time in addition to publishing the monthly creative arts news, having such contests, responding to submissions, and handling my family affairs as well. I hope you understand> but I wanted to respond re: this submission of yours.

You are welcome to submit any time to The Other Herald. Email is [email protected]. www.otherherald.com has info on submitting. I'll look for your work in future contests, also. Thanks again for submitting and I wish you the best in your writing, on Writerscafe and otherwise. Smiles,
Tanya

T. F. Rice (Editor of The Other Herald)

[Astrid Hamilton]

post script:

You write haiku so beautifully, that Masters Issa and Basho
would be proud in the same way, to have one masterfully combine perfect syllables in nature's syllabus,
combined with love to say...

[Astrid Hamilton]

...LOVE ME.


(oh, note to poet: I was answering in the quiet of my heart, the answer to the heart's burning question.)

I have never been so proud of the human kind, more than a woman giving birth- new life- more than a man going off to war to become a soldier to fight for his country, more than a teacher becoming a teacher to children becoming catchers of wisdom, more than people helping one another, or flowers blooming close to touch petals to kiss each other,
i have NEVER been more proud of any moment, any human, any poet, prophet, or philosopher on earth, in any time, now or the beginning of the when, when everything began to exist, than I am proud to hear the words "i love you" uttered, or true feelings shared by someone in love with another, one soul to another, who at once in a time feared to share.