My first breakup

this is about teenage love .

And i remember when i was fifteen,

I was so in love with you,

Felt like a beautiful dream though,

your arms around me it  felt so right ,

till we broke up because of a fight,

I thought this magic would last forever,

i wanted this dream to end never,

And as we danced to that perfect song,

but now you are gone and i have to be strong,

But i still have those sweet memories,

in my heart like treasuries,

And i remember when you were gone,

all i had to do was to move on,

and i remember, it bought a tear in my eye,

and that was the time,

we said to each other goodbye.

Author's Note

i hope you love it .

Reviews

[a schizophrenic writer]

Great job. You're great at writing, keep it up.

[zaishamalik93]

Thank You :))

[Gaelan_Hamilton]

A nice piece - simple and to the point! You could maybe have used some more full stops instead of commas here and there to create a more natural flow but you've done very well with your rhyming, which is something I have a bit of trouble with!

[zaishamalik93]

Thank you :)

[Sadiesmiles]

Good piece! You write really well....:)...

[zaishamalik93]

Thank you very much :)