The Rose

An angel may be too near of an amorous person. But she may be far away for him to approach her.

A morning bird beckoned me here,
To meet  my angel longing to share.
I felt too shy to gaze at her face,
What charm is there,I can't trace.

I saw the soft lips with very light hue,
What magic is hidden there,nobody knew.
I craved to touch the wonderful lips,
The bird stopped me to offer some tips.

I stared deep into the skies of the eyes,
I saw there rainbows playing with butterflies.
I craved to move my fingers over the gems,
The bird stopped me to offer  other games.

I looked at the thin pink-colored ear.
It was so lovely with the simple gear!
I stooped to see the type of the pierce,
The bird stopped me,it looked fierce!

I switched my vision to the  golden fleece,
That covered the head of my lovely bliss.
I moved to examine the sparkle of the hair,
The bird stopped me saying  it would not be fair.

With broken heart, I looked at her nose,
I saw with pleasure, it bloomed like a rose!
I opted to get closer  and take some smell,
The bird happily sang and wagged its tail.

Reviews

[Saddam]

this is very dearful natural poetry, I like willium Wordsworth poetry of nature, and this was like one of them. Not for comparison it is truly. Very imaginative and we can see your deep eyes on nature.
I stared deep into the skies of the eyes,
I saw there rainbows playing with butterflies.

[zainul]

I feel very honored and inspired by your admiring review.
Thank you dear poet for stopping by to grace this piece.

[Saddam]

absolutely my pleasure dear poet.

[TKBickel]

Your poem hummed beautifully in my mind with such perfect flow and rhythm.
I love the basic play of words that brings the vision in sharp focus.
This is a good niche for you. Let’s see more of this from you.

[cynthiabuhainbaello]

Great images for such a romantic poem - perhaps maintaining focus on the subject "rose" would have held the poem better as the rose is the flower of love.

[Rae Elizabeth]

Beautiful imagery.
Breathtaking.
Great write [:

-Rachael

[Natasha]

Astonishing!

[Ink Angel]

love the imagery of the bird and the perfectness of the whole poem, such a romantic flow. The last verse is great, very colourful indeed.

[EileenMarie]

That is such a pretty poem. I love the rhyming scheme. Great job!

[Kuhr Gred]

wow.. so lovely poem.. and really amazing.. description of the most beautiful flower.. GREAT WRITE ..
- Kuhr Gred

[BLACK PRINCE]

This is a beautiful and unique poem.
It depicts the observation and beauty of nature.

I understand your intentions when you decided
to write the poem in such colorful manner,
to reflect the natural beauty and concept of the poem.
But I really would suggest that you write the poem
in the normal font, in black.
Not only is the color not easy on the eye,
but written in color, it distracts the reader from grasping
the true beauty and meaning.
Let, rather, the powerful content and concept of your poem
instill those colors in the reader's mind.

I LIKE TO BE HONEST IN MY CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM
IN ORDER TO HELP FELLOW WRITERS.

WELL DONE!!!

[MIB]

Well I enjoyed this immensely, probably because I love watching the birds when I put bread and bits out in the back garden for them... I'm so happy this one ended up happily singing ;) keep up the awesome work :D