The Rose

The Rose

A Poem by zainul
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An angel may be too near of an amorous person. But she may be far away for him to approach her.

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A morning bird beckoned me here,
To meet  my angel longing to share.
I felt too shy to gaze at her face,
What charm is there,I can't trace.

I saw the soft lips with very light hue,

What magic is hidden there,nobody knew.
I craved to touch the wonderful lips,
The bird stopped me to offer some tips.

I stared deep into the skies of the eyes,

I saw there rainbows playing with butterflies.
I craved to move my fingers over the gems,
The bird stopped me to offer  other games.

I looked at the thin pink-colored ear.

It was so lovely with the simple gear!
I stooped to see the type of the pierce,
The bird stopped me,it looked fierce!

I switched my vision to the  golden fleece,

That covered the head of my lovely bliss.
I moved to examine the sparkle of the hair,
The bird stopped me saying  it would not be fair.

With broken heart, I looked at her nose,

I saw with pleasure, it bloomed like a rose!
I opted to get closer  and take some smell,
The bird happily sang and wagged its tail.

© 2012 zainul


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this is very dearful natural poetry, I like willium Wordsworth poetry of nature, and this was like one of them. Not for comparison it is truly. Very imaginative and we can see your deep eyes on nature.
I stared deep into the skies of the eyes,
I saw there rainbows playing with butterflies.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

zainul

10 Years Ago

I feel very honored and inspired by your admiring review.
Thank you dear poet for stopping by .. read more
Saddam

10 Years Ago

absolutely my pleasure dear poet.



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nice flow and structure and the theme conveys beautiful imagery well done

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

zainul

12 Years Ago

Thanks for the lovely review.
Pretty, and something different. Have never read anything like this. In a good way though:)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

zainul

12 Years Ago

Thanks for the lovely review.
Your words are encouraging.
I found it cute, and loved how you kept returning to the bird. Adorable and enjoyable. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

zainul

12 Years Ago

Thanks for the nice review.
It is inspiring.
This is very beautiful!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

zainul

12 Years Ago

I feel happy to read your inspiring review.
Thanks a lot.
Nicely penned my friend. The play of metaphor was well done. Imagery was excellent.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

zainul

12 Years Ago

Thanks for the wonderful review.
I feel honored by your nice words.
Very beautiful ... I can feel every line... great flow and rhyme.. I very much enjoyed this :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

zainul

12 Years Ago

Thanks for the nice review.
Thank you for enjoying.
Debbie_Philly

12 Years Ago

Your very welcome !!
zainul

12 Years Ago

Have a nice sleep with the fragrance of rose.
very descriptive, though a tad hard to follow, i could hardly make it through the first stanza and halfway through i just had to quit. There is some great potential here yet, and it may just be my style. I found it sleep and a bit droning and as before said, hard to follow, i saw in an earlier review that the critic found there to be loose ends, not quite tied up yet. But hey, that's what.sequels are.for! like i said, DO NOT let this discourage you! I can tell that you are.very passionate... i would consider using that passion to maybe write about something real, something close to your hert.

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is very beautiful. In fact it was breathtaking :) Good Job

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

zainul

12 Years Ago

Thank you Brittany for the great review and nice compliments.
Have a good day.
Brittany

12 Years Ago

You too
This is really beautiful! Stunning poetic voice and an amazing flow with your words. What more can a reader ask for? Nice job.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

zainul

12 Years Ago

Thank you Lindsay for the great review and compliments.
This is poetry, you listened to your heard.
Beautiful. Within the bird, as she.

Something Asian, is speaking rich in thee. 100!

E.L.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

zainul

12 Years Ago

Thanks for the great review.

12 Years Ago

You're welcome kind sir. Love your work! keep on listening, and I shall feel.

E.L.
zainul

12 Years Ago

I am very very impressed,adorable madam.

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Added on June 22, 2012
Last Updated on July 25, 2012

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Dhaka, Bangladesh



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