Walk

My experience of walking with my daughter

I will go for a walk today

My daughter will come with me

She has taken my charge from last May

Since doctor advised not to let me free

Last time we walked after dusk

Along the meandering path of an old lake

As I was attentive to my task

Suddenly I stumbled on something like snake

My daughter was not ready to see me fall

She cried and ran to pull me up

She tried hard but failed as she was quite small

Compared to my obese body and heavy stuff

People are not always helpless

A healthy youth came for my rescue

He gently pulled me and set me on a cosy place

He was quite expert like a fire crew

I thanked the youth from the core of my heart

He politely thanked back and left us there

I stared at the youth like a piece of art

And felt that there are many nice hearts to take care

Then we rested in the park and enjoyed the nature

Light reflected on the still water of the lake

Pleasant breeze played with us and  unknown creature

I also felt sighs of some fairies around my neck

My daughter insisted to start for home

But my heart stuck to the mysterious spot

I felt very happy under the natural dome

I wished to write poem with streaming thought

However,we left the park and returned to our den

I enjoyed sound sleep with happy dream

Today we will go out to walk again

To a lovely farm with winding stream

Reviews

[R J Askew]

A lovely poem. I have just been for a walk myself. 8 miles in the English country side. My walk was more of a prosaic plod than your poetic walk. There are several lines and observations in your poem that I love. Above all it has great humanity and a joy of life and others and nature in it. Long may you walk in poetry!

[zainul]

Thank you for the excellent review and heartfelt wishes.
I am very delighted to learn that you also walk.I got immense pleasure to know that you loved several lines and observations of the piece.

[R J Askew]

these are the lines I especially like ...
I thanked the youth from the core of my heart
I stared at the youth like a piece of art
............ they are absolutely lovely lines.

[R J Askew]

These lines are also blessed ...
But my heart stuck to the mysterious spot
I felt very happy under the natural dome
I wished to write poem with streaming thought
................. I believe they perfectly show how you felt so glad to be alive and so happy with your view of the world at that precise moment. A pure happiness. Nothing to do with big ideas and heavy sophisticated thinking, just pure feeling. Priceless. I hope you have shown your poem to your daughter!

[Katrina Mckeown]

There’s something humbling about having to rely on others and thankfully there are others who are honestly pleased to help. I enjoyed the way you conveyed this in this sweet poem.
Kind regards Katrina

[poetgurl]

WOW! This is really good, wonderful lovely write

[AYVID N]

This poem makes one feel so happy spontaneously, renews faith in humanity and the healing power of nature. So beautifully written, sir.

[zainul]

I feel blessed by the lovely review Divya.
I love your honest appreciation.

[AYVID N]

It is a pleasure all mine, sir.

[Aishwarya Prem]

Lovelyyyy!! I could picture what u tried to convey...looking forward to ur poeems

[zainul]

Thank you Aishwarya for the inspiring review.

[ReedWrite]

There is something humbling about having to rely on others to do things we once did with complete independence. Yet, you turned that frustration into a beautiful memory...a unity of spirit and heart. Beautiful.

[zainul]

I am very glad to read your wonderful review.
Thanks for stopping by and taking time to read and review the simple piece.

[Brittanie Bardwell]

Your poem is really touching as it captures the emotions of the man with the little bit of love and joy he has left with his daughter. I love that he walks with his daughter and still finds joy in the little things in life. Great work!

[zainul]

Thank you Brittanie for the wonderful words of appreciation.
I am very much delighted by the lovely review.

[jesserose99]

your words made me think of my relationship with my father before he died, and walking with him when he wasn't the pinnacle of perfect health. Something, I am so grateful for having done, yet still I miss him so. Really enjoyed this, the fairies round your neck, lovely touch!

[zainul]

Thank you dear poet for linking the story with your beloved father.You did a great job.It is really a pleasure of both parent and child when they support each other.It is a divine relationship.Wish your father rests in eternal peace !

[Tomás Ó C..]

Snapshot of life... it says in the good book "There will come a day when they will lead you by the hand a road you would rather not walk"... hard to deal with when it happens...

[zainul]

Thank you for stopping by and leave such a lovely observation.

[paul sal.....]

Daughters are the most special of Gods creations and yes, there are young boys and men who have good hearts and these are the young men one hopes their daughter will be atrracted to in the future. The pictures you paint of the country side intertwined with threads and strong stitches of the goodness in people reminds me that there is hope.....

[zainul]

Thank you for the wonderful review.
Yes,there is hope.