Fish Market

 

I  love to visit fish market .

Walking slowly with a basket

I look at the diverse collection

and enjoy their presentation.

 

Sometimes I  move around

and listen to  various sound

that a marketplace can offer

with bargain of customer.

 

I also look at the  fish vendor

to see how happy or sad his face.

This is really a great wonder

how he manages his work with grace.

 

I am afraid the vendor will lose his job

when the water body will die of pollution.

My journey to fish market will stop

if the anarchy continues without solution.

 

 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Mark]

An interesting little stroll through one of the happy moments of your life. Thank you for sharing.
Might I offer a few suggestions, to make your poem more approachable to native English-speakers?
For starters, your first two stanzas were in a-a-b-b "couplet" mode, while the last two were in
a-b-a-b "quatrain" mode. I would recommend choosing one or the other and staying with it throughout.
I would like to work with you, if you wish it, to make your flow more natural. Your syllable counts vary too widely, and the stresses do not fall regularly. This is not as difficult as it might at first appear...but admittedly, I would not attempt it in Urdu or Farsi, so you are already way ahead of me!

[zainul]

Thank you Mark for stopping by to review my work.
I welcome your nice gesture to work with me to make the flow more natural.
I appreciate you for being very generous to me.
I understood the point of "couplet" mode and "quatrain" mode.
I felt the problem while writing this piece. I confess,I wanted to post the piece for taking advantage to edit later.
Please send your suggestions about modes and syllables to me as messages.That will help me as tutorials.

[Cryingkate]

Oh Dear Mark, Consider this please.
I hope Zainul does not change anything... We are so fortunate thru internet to meet people so far away that we would of never known in our life.

This diversity has been such a pleasure for me. When I listen and read from others like Zainul they all have a certain way of using the English language as we know in their own special way.
This to me is so Beautiful ! They somehow convey parts of their language and way and of word usage that I do not want to see changed. I can hear them speak as though in their own language yet with English words.
What I'm trying to say is something like a song and 50 Beautiful singers They all are unique and sing it special unto themselves. There is no two singers sounding alike.

Well so it is with the poetry somehow they each have their own style. I do not want the writers to change and conform to one set of rules.
For me I am not looking at the count and syllables. I am looking at the Heart and the Message and the individual Spirit that is delivering the message.

If this was categorized as a certain Ballad, Sonnet etc... ok then there's an issue of categorizing.
But for free style I say "Touch Not That Is"

I would like to add though that I think you are sweet and kind offering your knowledge and time to help someone learn and improve on skills.
But from my view I treasure it more just as it is in it's "Pristine" package.

Connie

[Cryingkate]

Must also add, I don't even see any flaws, The whole message is beautifully presented to me .Maybe it's like I said: I hear the Beauty and see no flaws.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the description of the fish market. The ending was sad. The ocean is a source of life for many. Even in the USA. Most fish are farmed raised. Even the great lakes are polluted now. I like the way you watched their faces. I told my kids. Do your best with a smile in your work. Make the day better and easily. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[zainul]

Your stopping here to glorify the piece is a memorable moment for me.
Thanks for the compliments and admiring review.
I feel very honored that you shared with your kids.
We may raise the issue for addressing the problem together.

[gabrielle]

every week i would go to the fish market to buy fresh fish. indeed, if we keep on destroying the bodies of water we may not be able to enjoy the benefits we are enjoying today. very relevant write.

[zainul]

Thank you for stopping by Gabrielle to grace this piece.
I appreciate your words of support.read moreThank you for stopping by Gabrielle to grace this piece.
I appreciate your words of support.
We are damaging our treasures and opportunities.
The scope to stop this trend may slip from our control if we remain unconcerned.

[Rick Puetter]

Dear Zainul,

I am listening with wonder. I can see your country. I have visited it twice. It is a marvel to the US, Canada, what we call Western Society. But we are the minority. You (and China) are the norm. That is an unfamiliar thought for us. And I note the differences in our expression of English. But India is the most populace, English speaking country. So again, you are the norm. We are the exception. There is no difficulty understanding you, My Friend, though your English is different. It is refreshing, actually. Love to listen to it and expand my horizons.

Now, all that aside, what of the meat of the poem? This is so wonderful, too. You have a way of simply setting down life. What more wonderful thatn a fish market? What could be more down-to-earth? And your humanity in wondering if the fish market will close and suffer from the selfish greed of humanity in polluting our oceans, is so wonderful and caring for the human species.

Greatest respect, and kindest regards! If we all thought and felt like you, there would be little danger to the planet and I would breathe more freely.

High marks! Greatly enjoyed.

Rick

[zainul]

Dear Rick,
I feel very humbled by your generous compliments.
I thank you for the kind words and strong support.
The voice of a poet emerged from a scientific background like you can be a great asset for the world.
I can reasonably hope that we will live here in this planet with all the systems that make our home a pleasant place.
Thank you for stopping by to glorify this work.

[Kenaz]

Perhaps anarchy is the only thing that can save the fish vendor. Turning away from commonly held ideals to ones that are more traditional, such as turning away from large supermarkets in favour of small vendors. I too fear for the job of the fish vendor should the oceans be ruined by man.

[zainul]

Thanks for the great innovative idea.
I could never think like you.
I am very pleased to read your admiring review.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Your poem is very effective in describing the fish market you enjoy visiting, zainul, and in making a statment about the effect of water pollution on the lives of the fish and of those who eat them and make a living from selling them. I liked the rhyme and the rhythm as well. Good work!

[zainul]

Thank you dear poet for the thoughtful review.
It makes the circumstances and events surrounding the habitat of fish,interaction of other factors that contribute to pollute the water bodies and livelihood of peoples and consumption of fish for nutrition.
Other way round we may call it supply chain in marketing jargon.
Thanks for contributing greatly in the conversation.

[Michael G. Smith]

Your learning English as you write in it brings a unique sound to your poem.

[zainul]

Thank you Michael for the very inspiring review.
This means a lot to me.

[icelandicblue]

This problem is faced by all those associated with the fishing industry throughout the world. Modern technology and robbed the sea of too much and pollution has affected the sea, case in point the nuclear runoff in Japan flows into the ocean. I often wonder what the final outcome of that will be. You've created a warm snapshot of the fish market while weaving the problems they face throughout the poem.

[zainul]

Thanks for the great contribution.
I appreciate your knowledge on this very aspect.
This will enlighten us and many learned writers of this site who will in turn influence the policy makers to ameliorate the situation.
Thank you for stopping by to grace this piece by your admiring review.

[Marie]

I do hope water pollution will not destroy the fish market, though this is something I have never seen.

[zainul]

Thank you dear friend for stopping by and offering your valuable observation.
I have vented my apprehension that someday the fish market will be destroyed as a result of pollution.This may not happen soon.But,its signs are already apparent in our surrounding.Many delicious native species have become rare.Over exploitation is also another factor that aggravates the situation.Besides,introduction of alien species and invasive species pose as great threats to indigenous species and natural habitat.
I beg your apology if incomprehensible scientific terms are used.
Have a nice time,dear friend.

[Angi]

I love to visit farmer's markets here where I live, Zainul. Fresh fish is an expensive dish served in my house only on special occasions. The water quality all over the world is affecting the health of the fish. Even canned fish warn of mercury levels and such. I can see the livlihood of the fishmonger is questioned in your poem. It is hard to do anything else when that is all you know. Interesting, thought provoking work, Zainul. I hope you are well. Angi~

[zainul]

Thank you Angi for stopping by to bring many vital points for discussion.
I wrote this piece to draw the kind attention of the learned writers for our future.
This is a question of survival of all species including human being and diverse fish species.
When water bodies are polluted the very existence of fish species is at stake which follows the livelihood question of fishmongers and many other peoples involved with it.
Yes,I am well.
Have a nice time,dear friend.
Zainul

[Paul Seaman]

Okay, so let stop using disposable water bottles !!!!

[zainul]

Thank you Paul for stopping by to offer the admiring review.
The suggestion should be followed sincerely.

[Paul Seaman]

It is by me. In my food trailer I serve filtered water with lemon in compostable plantbased cups and yes, I do charge for it ! :-)

[zainul]

That's a great idea Paul.
Do you purchase the compostable plantbased cups?
How we may get them?I mean who are the manufacturers and what is their cost?