My Lost Bird

I lost my bird and found her again

This is my bird
Once I lost her for lack of care
I regret quite hard
I confess it was not at all fair

A good bird is a part of life
She gives company in joy and strife

She flew away for my neglect again and again
I was the reason for her infinite pain

I don't know if she cursed me
I don't know how she got free

Now she frolics among the trees
Her beauty is always on increase

Come back my lost bird,come back soon
We will live together under sun and moon

 

Reviews

[Devanshu Rajput]

Your poem makes us realize of our often made mistakes. At first we don't care about our possessions. But, when the possessed thing gets out of our reach, we regret of our mistake.

I can get you, longing for a bird that you lost.

An another great write.

Pen on.

Devanshu

[zainul]

Thank you Devanshu for stopping by to grace this piece with your admiring review.
I am immensely inspired by this.
This means a world to me.

[Michael G. Smith]

If you love it set it free, if it loves it will come back.

[zainul]

That's a wonderful lesson,Michael.
Thanks for stopping by to glorify this piece.
This means a world to me.

[Michael G. Smith]

By your replies I can sense you are quite a humble man. I am glad we can both connect through our given talents.

[zainul]

We are already connected through our hearts.
Thanks for the kind words and wonderful invitation.

[Great Aunt Astri]

It is so easy to let little birds slip away. I see you poem as an analogy for anything precious that we have lost. Sometimes they don't come back and stay frolicing in the tress. Ah, but life is a learning experience, isn't it?

[zainul]

Sure,life is a learning experience,Great Aunt Astri.
I agree with your analogy for anything precious that we have lost.I also agree that and also sometimes they don't come back and stay frolicking in the tress.
Your wonderful review made me think over which precious things or persons I have lost for ever during the last half of a century of my effective lifespan.
I have not enough words to reciprocate your wonderful review.
Thank you so much,dear friend.:)

[ferousfinite]

Nice job with the emphasis, and issuance.

[zainul]

Thanks for the inspiring review.

[Cody Williams]

Beautiful poem! Thanks for sharing!

-CW

[zainul]

Thanks for the great review.
This means a lot to me.:)

[Cody Williams]

No problem at all:)

[SteveB]

A very nice metaphor for the loss of love due to lack of care. I enjoyed the rhyme scheme although I have to confess that sometimes the meter seemed a bit off. The first line of the third stanza is where I tripped when reading it aloud.

[zainul]

I am very happy that you tested the piece with all sincerity.
I express my heartfelt gratitude for this favor.
I will try to fix the meter and other problems later when I will get time for revision.
In fact,this is a usual problem with the rhyming.
Free verse perhaps has a little flexibility and advantage over the rhymed ones.
I feel blessed that you stopped by to grace this piece.

[SteveB]

It was my pleasure to read this piece. I hope my review did not seem harsh. It is my belief that we are all here trying to improve at this thing we love.

[zainul]

Thank you once again.
I cordially harsh reviews from the knowledgeable persons.
And your review was quite mild and methodical.
I listened yourself by reading aloud.
I already expressed my gratitude,dear friend.
Yes,we are all here trying to improve at this thing we love.
I enjoy academic discussion.

[Prritiy]

a sweet poem, filled with innocence , liked it :)

[zainul]

Thank you so much................:)

[Prritiy]

You are welcome :)

[zainul]

My pleasure,lovely friend.:)

[Prritiy]

:) .................

[Magnolia]

How to interpret ? A bird or a 'bird' ?...either way, you describe how love can be lost through neglect. A nice read, which made me ponder !...thanks...Maggie

[zainul]

This review makes me very happy.
Thank you Magnolia for stopping by to grace this piece.:)

[Laura]

I realize you often leave such wonderful reviews on my writing and I have yet to return the favour, something I much regret!

This is a beautiful poem, one I think many people are able to relate to. It's true, we really never acknowledge how important or special somebody in our life is until they are no longer there.

Great work, I look forward to reading (and reviewing) more of yours!

[zainul]

Thank you for the great gesture.
Your heartfelt words and generous compliments made my day.read moreThank you for the great gesture.
Your heartfelt words and generous compliments made my day.
I am very very inspired by your admiring review.
Thank you Laura for stopping by to grace this piece.:)

[one sky]

Nice metaphor. Once we have something important in our hands, we should treat it with great care so that it won't search for another hands to take care of it.
I hope the bird will come back soon.
Nicely penned.

[zainul]

Thank you Margaux for such a nice interpretation.
I am very glad for being so nice to me in hoping for the return of the bird.