Passion

This is a real story of a passionate girl

This is an angel with the face of doll
She is an open book glorifying the hall

Her black eyes glitter in strange beauty
I may gaze at them for hours as my duty

She takes care of her old mother
She has no other work to bother


She has a pain deep inside her heart
Her father left the family to live apart

She dropped herself from school for a sacred mission
To look after her mother as token of love and passion

I adore the girl who really writes wonderful poem
I wish for her a handsome groom and happy home

Reviews

[Everett DeValle]

I really enjoyed your poem, Zainul...it reminds me of any doting children that would sacrifice their life and time, to help their parent...I know I have, and it wasn't easy...my life is just bittersweet.

Please, forgive my tardiness for not accepting your friendship immediately...I was busy these past months.

[zainul]

Thank you Everett for joining the steam of conversation with your lovely observation and wonderful review.
Please,never mind.
Sharing in this site is our optional work.
So,delay in accepting request for friendship is not considered any deviation.
Thanks for your nice gesture.

[Everett DeValle]

You are so welcome, zainul.

[zainul]

My pleasure :)

[quinfinn]

i have not been on recently in force but i am glad to have found you still composing poetry. excellent piece.

[zainul]

I feel blessed that you stopped by.
I have no word to reciprocate your generous compliments.read moreI feel blessed that you stopped by.
I have no word to reciprocate your generous compliments.
Thanks for the admiring review.

[quinfinn]

a pleasure, my friend....

[zainul]

Pleasure for me too,dear friend :)

[Akira]

Thank you, this is simply beautiful.

[zainul]

You are appreciated for the admiring review.
I feel very inspired by your contribution.

[Akira]

Thank you. :)

[zainul]

:)

[Reeti]

The leading character has been depicted as a paragon of both inner and outer beauty and empathy. The most scintillating parts of the poem to me is the rhyming and the correlative size of each stanza. The meaning conveyed by it is, of course, enticing in its simplicity. I highly admire the part that she is 'an open book glorifying the hall'. It signifies her honesty and sincerity in everything she does. When you wrote "I adore the girl who really writes wonderful poem," if find it quite ironic that rather you are the one writing the lovely poem instead. Perhaps, adding a poetic line of her own verifying that she is a poet as well would have been favorable?

[zainul]

Thank you Reeti for stopping by and gracing the conversation with your wonderful review.
You may love to know each and every word of this poem is based on real situation including the poetic talent of the girl.
I have not exposed the actual identity of the girl for the sake of privacy and avoiding any embarrassment.
Thanks for your enlightening contribution.

[Reeti]

ohhh, i understand now. How interesting! Has she read your poem yet? She might have already, i think, for she is an authoress of poems herself!

[Reeti]

Sorry, i missed this description u've attached! - "This is a real story of a passionate girl"

[zainul]

Yea,she has read it.
Thanks for your favor.

[Penlady]

Lovely....one tenderness pulls from another..what love is about...

[zainul]

Thank you for the admiring review with generous words.

[Penlady]

Thank you, dear poet for sharing your heart ...

[NaomiJim]

This is simply lovely.

[zainul]

Thank you Naomi for your amazing review.

[Marie]

This girl sounds like a wonderful person with a beautiful soul, and I too wish you all happiness,

[zainul]

Thank you Marie for the wishes and inspiring review.
Yes,the girl is really a wonderful person with a beautiful soul.

[Tasha]

Amazing work.

This girl seems like a dime a dozen. Such a beautiful write and you told her story well.

[zainul]

Thank you Tasha for the amazing review.
The girl will love your wonderful observation.

[Tasha]

You're very welcome.

[Felicity's Eve]

This is lovely. So full of emotion. And I myself can detect a contrast of darkness and light. :)

Amazing work. :)

[zainul]

Thank you Nora for your investigative and admiring review.
Thanks also for being able to detect a contrast of darkness and light.
This is a real account of the life of a girl.

[Felicity's Eve]

It's no problem. And I can believe that. :)

[zainul]

Very nice of you :)

[Felicity's Eve]

:)

[zainul]

:)