Moon

A firefly became the moon

She captured a firefly tonight
It looked very cool and bright

The firefly was not happy
It tried hard to be free

It did not want any fight
But,moved left and right

It became successful soon
It flew to the sky to be the moon

Reviews

[Faffy]

This is brilliant! And yet so simple! I'm amazed at your ability to make something so simple into a poem that brings back memories of me and my friends catching fireflies :) but now I feel a bit guilty because u never thought about the fire fly haha well done an amazing read :)

Roshan

[zainul]

Thank you Roshan for the admiring review and lovely compliments.
I enjoy an imaginative world where fireflies dance around us with cool
light allowing us to remember our sportive life in the past.
We can still help the fireflies glow happily by simply keeping their habitat safe.
Let's try to do it from our own places.

[Patricia B. Hepler]

Absolutely wonderful, zainul.
My new fav poem..
*pat

[zainul]

Thank you Patricia for the wonderful review and favor.

[Patricia B. Hepler]

Zainul, this piece is enjoyable and very good! *pat

[zainul]

I feel very very honored to learn that you have enjoyed it.

[Rosallia]

I quite liked this short little poem. It almost reminds me of a nursery rhyme (in a good way). The simplicity of the piece adds to the overall unity of effect, yet it is deep enough to stir many different thoughts, forgotten childhood memories, the romanticism of the firefly becoming the moon... it's beautiful really. Very well written! I'm impressed =)

[Kajal Gulabani]

A striking piece indeed. I am 'head over heels' in love with this phenomenon.

[zainul]

Thank you for the wonderful review.
I am glad that you are 'head over heels' in love with this phenomenon.

[Hannah Jocks]

Beautifully written poem. I loved it.

[zainul]

Thank you Hannah for your inspiring review.
Glad to know that you loved it. :)

[Hannah Jocks]

Your welcome, it was my pleasure. I will be glad to review more when i have the time.

[zainul]

I feel very blessed by your assurance.
Please do come and share your views.
I will also read and review your lovely works.

[Hannah Jocks]

Ok, Thanks sounds great! I am currently working on a story and trying my best on poems. I am really bad at poems and need a lot of tips. It would be a great help if you could provide me with some constructive critisizm.

[zainul]

Thanks for your nice approach for tips and constructive criticism.
My tips for everyone and myself are:
1.Never hesitate to write poems.
2.Never abstain from writing in the fear of rhyming pattern,grammar or vocabulary limitation.
3.Never worry about others' negative criticism.
I think these '3 Never' is enough for you and me to get adequate inspiration to write poems.
Cheers!!!

[Hannah Jocks]

Thank you so much. That really helped! (:

[zainul]

(:

[Meliss@k]

mmmh. :)
So sweet and innocent.
I feel like this would be perfect in a Children's book for bedtime stories! I know I loved reading it. :)

[zainul]

Thank you for the very admiring review.
I am very happy to read your suggestion that this would be perfect in a Children's book for bedtime stories.
I am also very glad to know that you loved reading it.
Sorry Melissa for replying you so late.
Actually,I could not notice in the stream of e-mails.
Stay happy with your lovely smile. :)

[Riley Mistwood]

very nice. i enjoyed this poem

[zainul]

I feel very happy that you enjoyed the poem.

[LA Lorena]

This is a lovely, yet simple inspiration for a sweet write.

[zainul]

Adore your admiring review and compliments.

[AYVID N]

Everyone loves freedom... to be what you want to be! A timeless piece of writing!

[zainul]

Yes,everyone loves freedom.
Thanks for your admiring review and nice compliments.

[M.M.I]

This is a great little riddle. I really enjoyed it. thanks for sharing it, zainul.

[zainul]

Thank you for the admiring review.
I feel blessed that you enjoyed it.

[SparrowSong]

Beautiful in its simplicity, with a message of hope in that even a firefly can shine as bright as the moon, why can't I? Lovely to read you.

[zainul]

I am impressed by your lovely review.
Yes,you can also do impossible.
Will force is power.
A little spark can create great forest fire.
Poets like William Shakespeare and Robert Frost shine like sun and illuminate our hearts.
I am very inspired by your wonderful words.
Thanks again for the admiring review.