Haiku: What-Ifs

A haiku on the questions that always seem to plague us...

Ghosts of past

Haunting the present

Clouding future

Reviews

[Pratik]

Loved this.. I have never been able to ascertain a piece as a haiku, that syllable count really bothers me.. But I like this.... It talks about the persistence of the past and uncertainty of future both of which takes a toll on your present.... Nicely done :)

[Zainab UF]

Thank you so much! And it's not really necessary that you should stick to the 5-7-5 rule when writing Haiku in English, as long as the total syllable count remains under seventeen (courtesy Wikipedia.) Do give it a try - I find it really uplifting.

[SmileBig :)]

Oh wow this is so great. I usually am not into reading haikus but this one is awesome.

[Zainab UF]

I'm overjoyed that I could write something that pleased you so much! Thanks for the review!

[Ella]

I like it! It is very different, I usually don't read Haiku's, thought as someone pointed out below me, I do believe they are 5 7 5, but there might be different ways of reading it, no idea, haha. Anyways, it is amazing! :)

[Zainab UF]

Pure haiku indeed follow the 5-7-5 rule, but English haiku do not always adhere strictly to this. But the one rule you never circumvent while writing haiku: it shouldn't exceed seventeen syllables.

And I'm glad you liked it! :)

[Ella]

Good to know, haha. Plus, how couldn't I, it's so unique :)

[Dr. Wood ?]

clever little poem..I am no expert as far as Haiku is concerned but I thought the syllable count might be off..I am probably wrong..I thought it was 5 7 5

[Zainab UF]

Haiku in English need not necessarily follow the 5-7-5 count to a tee. Personally, I feel haiku is more about expressing much in a few words than the syllables per line.

I appreciate your feedback! Thank you so much for taking your time to read and review!

[Dr. Wood ?]

thanks for the information regarding Haiku

[Natasha]

It is okay- I only say this because it seems you have picked generic words- try to be a little bit more creative with your word usages and conveying emotion

[Zainab UF]

Thank you for that instructive advice! I indeed have a lot to work on and I do realize that.

[Natasha]

definitely! haiku's are really hard, even though they are so short--very tricky! i still like it but just work on the word usages and you should be golden :) don't ever give up on your writing!

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Wow, I really like this haiku Zainab UF! I do know how it feels to hold onto questions, doubts, regrets that interfere with the present and possibly future. Sometimes we have to let all of it go and move on to remove the ghosts of the past. You know what I mean? I love the message behind your haiku. I enjoyed reading it, too! It seems like I could never accomplish writing a meaningful haiku or even get the syllables correct. Good job!! :)

Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

[Zainab UF]

I know what you mean! I brood about the past and worry excessively about the future that sometimes I forget to live in the present. That realization led me to write this. I'm glad you enjoyed reading this! :)

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

You're truly welcome and you deserve a lot of reviews on this haiku :)

[Aehr]

amazing! You do have a way with words! :)

[Zainab UF]

Thank you, Rhea! That just made my day. :)