Your Frozen Heart

A poem I wrote in the midst of some emotional thoughts. It's my first attempt at poetry, so please give me constructive advice!

Those freezing hands aren't your fault

They carry scars from long before

Being afraid to love someone,

You turn your back on the words I uttered.

 

My heart is at the point of breaking

Our love was so beautiful before

Even if I can let you know my love momentarily

But would you just send me back to endure the frigid winds?

 

Even if fate's game hurts your heart

One the other side of your tear-streaked face

There is a light that shines through  the darkness

The one that guides our love to each other.

 

We can both live in a place frozen in time

Someplace that can take away the sorrow and loneliness

For you, that place is here in my arms

Don't be afraid, don't hesitate.

 

For anyone to be with you

Makes life in this world shine brighter

If it was me, I'd warm your heart

With my timeless tenderness.

 

A single ray of light swoops down into the darkness

Guiding you towards our love.

Fit yourself within my arms

Your embraced heart, slowly begins to thaw.

Reviews

[Edalene Connell]

I like it. Poems can be written anyway you like really.

[Jemma]

It was pretty good for a first poem >.< I barley remember mine, I was to younge but since I had an obsession I can almost guarentee it was about lil purple and green aliens on mars. You should have a look at some other peoples poems on here and see the diffrent styles and such. maybe you will find something you will be able to work with. This poem didn't rhym wich was a shame. i love my poems to rhym :P But it did flow nicely through most of it. Congrads on your first poem. and welcome to the world of poetry.
Great write.