How can one survive the slave system

words based on my own language

In these times what has been given for handwork has made success. To struggle has made one embrace life's pain. Motivated how the mind drives to push forward doubts enter the path to be overcome. This reality has been forced into the lives of a system of slaves. How does unity change the lives of those around us if the thought never comes to mind. Man made materials have taken the soul of what a purpose is to be followed from birth. The journey to reach deep requires a sacrifice of all to find what results mean to you as one. Faith has given me as I strength to dream to bring to light what creation has made. Through belief in the eyes of those who think there is more to self teaching. Deeper I dig for others do not see to become your thoughts before death overtakes the life given. Resources needed to explore what one has found to be explained as studied for I observed in the form of energy. Help to be given to those who except hear my words to be spoken in silence as I pass. 

Reviews

[Natasha]

this sounds like something I would write about or language I write in- I really liked all of your incites to the world and questions that are being pondered in your brain. One thing critism wise is you are missing a few commas certain places and your thoughts jumble into a run on sentence. Maybe splitting thoughts up into sections or stanzas would make it easier to read. Overall writing wise I would say this is a strong piece and really well done. "to struggle has made one embrace lie's pain"--i like that line a lot and i think a lot of people can relate to it in this time and age where there is so much more struggles going on whether it be friend wise/relationships/money problems, etc. Good work...

[zachary1344]

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