Death waiver no. 7

Death waiver no. 7

i humble before no god or man
so i take my last stand
with a bible and pistol in hand
this gun really brings out
the black in my eyes
the truth in the lies
the revelation of a .45
angels fall from flight
i am the man in the dark light
a sinister sight
the damnation fight
god’s only true plight
comings for you
in the middle of the night
i put the black steel to your head
vision goes red
can’t escape
the screaming of the dead
do yourself a favor
sign this death waiver
look into my eyes
and grace your savior


--Z.Silas Herrera

Reviews

[Zelligg]

So imposing, scary really, my heart was sped up by the end. It would make great oral poetry too; you prolly know that!
The reader must wonder, "Who IS this?" Intense and spare. Good work.

[Chelsea L. Ellsworth]

wow....Whats ".45" mean? eheheheh.o-well. greatly done though^.^

[Chelsea L. Ellsworth]

wow....Whats ".45" mean? eheheheh.o-well. greatly done though^.^

[Bethany Wong]

The pace of this is amazing - it seems to get faster, almost snowballing to the last lines.
I also love how you link a symbol of violence to almost religious truth:

This gun really brings out
The black in my eyes
The truth in the lies
The revelation of a .45

This is a fantastic piece of work. Thankyou for sharing it.

[October]

This is very intense, raw emotion.
I LOVE poetry like this.

"Vision goes red
Can't escape
The screaming of the dead
Do yourself a favor
Sign this death waiver"


Those lines were my favorite.
This is a great expression of emotion.
Thanks so much for sharing.