moving day

boxes,boxes and more boxes

rooms that where once full now empty

friends that where once happy now are sad

tears are falling as my moving truck drives away

saying goodbye is not easy

a life I was comfortable with is now gone

"what now"i think to myself as I lye in bed

now lying on a pillow soked in my tears

not sure how to make friends ,don't know if its

worth it anymore.

 

lonely in a new place full of unknown people

I feel my heart broken

I want my old life back

I sit in my room thinking of how

ill never hear my friends laughter again

or hear her silly stories

or see her beautiful art

 

my friends I will miss yall more

than I can put in words

yall have held me together

kept me sane

I will be lost without yall

 

 

Reviews

[Dalton Holt]

This is quite relatable in how many of us have had to move and this were separated from our friends. It sounds like you wrote this out of recent experience so I hope you're doing good in your new home. Perhaps you've even met new friends, but if not then I hope you do. As for your poem, you did good at expressing the sadness that ishe felt when moving. There are some nice, relatable lines in there, like "I sit in my room, thinking of how, I'll never hear my friends' laughter again." I just think you could word some of these better. Like those lines could become: 'I lie on my old bed, now in my new room, as I try to realize, I will never hear, my friends laughter again.' Also at the end I think you should lay off on the word 'y'all.' I know you use that word frequently but 'you' would work a lot better. I think you should just change the first and last ones to 'you', but the second should be 'y'all held' rather than 'y'all have held.' It just sounds better. All in all it's a good poem but it needs improvement

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

Im sorry Yvo Miki.. I really am.. I wish you the best about you moving..

You will have friends because I am one of your friends.. im always gonna be here for you.. you can message me everyday on ere if you want.. im always on here.. LOL..

Anyways.. That was a great poem that came form the heart.. keep up the good work!!

[yvo miki]

i wrote a poem here because for some reason it wont let me post a poem

[yvo miki]

OLD FRIENDS


i know for sure now that i'm sliping away from yalls minds
people i once called friends now saying they are starting to for get me
i can feel the pain rising in my heart
saddness that they will once not know who i am
already forgetting my name and what my smile looks like
what color my eyes are
what i like and dont like

[Luna Chan]

I AM NOT FORGETTING YOU! I TOLD YOU THIS! THAT WAS PRESTON THAT FORGOT YOUR NAME! He has short term memory loss when he sees your face, he'll remember you, just not your name! he explained it to me today! i told him what you emailed me and he needed a reminder! the first time i ever cried in front of him was when you left waskom for good! that is what got him to remember! i can't believe that you would think that of us!

[Luna Chan]

your eyes are a brownish hazel. your whole name is Victoria Amber Bennett. your smile makes me feel like my heart is on fire. i remember your tears. how i tried everything in my power to protect you. i just wasn't strong enough. im so sorry.

[yvo miki]

i know it wasnt u who forgot me its just a poem chill out sis i love u and yes im glad u know that oh and my eyes are blue not brownish hazel but they do change color

[Luna Chan]

oops... sorry!

[yvo miki]

its okay ill be okay

[Luna Chan]

yeah I hope. check your read request. yeah one is about you and I feel bad now.

[yvo miki]

its okay ill read it

[yvo miki]

dalton holt -thanks for the adivce im glad u like it

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree.
"my friends I will miss yall more
than I can put in words
yall have held me together
kept me sane
I will be lost without yall"
New places are scary and a adventure. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry and thoughts.
Coyote

[yvo miki]

aww thanks

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[closed]

happy travels friend

but wherever you go, keep your pen at heart


-Dream

[AaronFreitas]

It does suck to move and start over. So many new opportunities yet you miss so much of the normalcy in life. Awesome wording I enjoyed it :)

[dw817]

There was really only one friend I had growing up, Victoria. And that was Brett. But I need never worry about moving. My Dad bought the house years ago and - well, it's still there today.

But reading your heartfelt poem does remind me of school. And yes, you leave one school to join another and you do feel you're going to miss others, although in my case it was I was going to miss the teachers as I was closer to them than the students.

Yet - that's life. Out with the old, in with the new. Good air in, bad air out. I think that's why when we are so confused with our emotions at times we SIGH to enable this very action of self-healing. :)

[Kurai.Merodi]

Awww~ I know whats it's like moving and its sh*t but i found new friends and I kept in touch with my old ones.

I hope where ever you're going you'll have fun and make new mates >w

[yvo miki]

ya sucks a*s lol but I will still be on here

[Kurai.Merodi]

yay, that's good then

[yvo miki]

hahah ya im happy here

[Luna Chan]

yvo i love u more than u know sweetie. i will miss u greatly and im crying as i read this because there will always be pain. no one will ever replace u and u know that! u are the best friend i could have asked for. we've literally been through h*** and back but in the end, we made it. even though im crying they are tears of joy and sadness because im happy for u and yet sad to see u go.

[yvo miki]

aww why u have to make me cry I love u

[Luna Chan]

well u know how it is. i put my feelings in my writing.

[yvo miki]

heheh

[Luna Chan]

lol yeah :3

[yvo miki]

I will never forget u either

[Luna Chan]

u know I wont that's not my way

[yvo miki]

awwww I know u wont

[Luna Chan]

Yeah lol I will miss u a lot

[yvo miki]

me too im sad now

[Luna Chan]

dont be. i know i cried but i think ill heal sometime.

[yvo miki]

aww i miss u so much

[Luna Chan]

I miss you too there isn't a day that goes by that I don't miss you

[yvo miki]

awww that makes me happy

[Luna Chan]

good I'm glad

[yvo miki]

so what class u in

[Luna Chan]

None I'm in lunch with Preston

[yvo miki]

oh cool tell preston i said hi

[Luna Chan]

Lol I will sweetie.

[yvo miki]

thanks sorry it took me an hour to answer

[Luna Chan]

its okay he says hi back. it took him a minute to remember who u were lol

[yvo miki]

wow and okay cool

[Luna Chan]

Lol yup I love u and miss u yvo

[yvo miki]

well idk u didnt even reminder me

[Luna Chan]

i do remember you! i can not ever forget you! the second i do will have to be the second i die! i haven't forgotten you.

[yvo miki]

awww ur sweet

[Luna Chan]

you are too yvo

[yvo miki]

thanks so much hehheheh

[Luna Chan]

:) lol I smile at you

[yvo miki]

yassssssssssss im awsome

[Luna Chan]

lmao yvo :) XD

[yvo miki]

hehehheheheheheheh sooo happppyyyyyy

[Luna Chan]

I am not so fortunate.

[yvo miki]

why not ??!!!!

[Luna Chan]

go to google plus and read my recent post.

[yvo miki]

i already did

[Luna Chan]

Okay good bye Abby is pissing me off. I need you here lol and I know I can't have you here but that doesn't stop me from wanting you here

[yvo miki]

it wont let me read it send it to my email

[Luna Chan]

what do u mean? my writing?

[yvo miki]

no some of ur comments

[Luna Chan]

oh okay i get it now

[yvo miki]

ya lol its annoying

[Luna Chan]

Yeah I bet it is

[yvo miki]

ugg...i wanna writed but it wont let me

[Luna Chan]

lmao wdy mean?

[yvo miki]

same old ,same old crap

[Luna Chan]

yeah i know the feeling lol

[yvo miki]

i got accepted into a collage !!!

[Luna Chan]

yay! which collage? tell me!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Luna Chan]

btw check hangouts. ill explain there.

[yvo miki]

explain what

[Luna Chan]

check hangouts and u will see.

[yvo miki]

okay i got it !!!!!!!!!!!