Mom and Moon.

"O Powerful Moon! Thou be the the second idyllic sight thine eyes hast ever drank. Swift down sometimes to kindle thy soul to eternal bliss with thy parlance of silence. Slumber thy mind to the same lullaby that dearest mother used to sing in thy name. Thou were beautiful then thou be beautiful now but never most than her! If thou hast divine omnipotence keep thy mother always in a eternal bliss , I plead. . For she dearest to thy heart than any mortal , count me too!
O the greatest romancer! Thou be the the second idyllic sight thine eyes hast ever drank.."

Reviews

[Erinne S.]

I loved the style of wording you chose! It was different and I like reading things that are different :)

"always in a eternal bliss" It should be written as, "always in an eternal bliss" My only fix for you :)

~Erinne

[yusuf]

Thank You so much! You always redress my work so honestly and always leave me with a sense to improve! I love your reviews the most! Thank You so much!

[beautiful dreamer]

you have beautiful word choice :)

[yusuf]

Thank You beautiful , You have a beautiful face. :)

[beautiful dreamer]

thank you :)

[AYVID N]

Liked the emotion in the poem a lot. I love the way you make the mother paramount. A great attempt at a novel theme.
My suggestion, have two poems wth moon as the theme...One about the moon and maternal love, the second exclusively about the moon being the greatest romancer.
The thought process has begun superbly in any case. My compliments! DN

[yusuf]

Thank You so much! I shall keep your important advice close to my heart and mind! I am honored by your visit! :)

[wendy727]

this is amazing. will you ever publish a book of poems?

[yusuf]

Thank you so so so much! I am quite flattered with the question. :)

[Sourodip]

Moon is something that has always eluded poets......loved the way you have imagined it.....

[yusuf]

Thank you so much! I am so glad you liked it!

[Dark Butterfly]

double thumbs ups

[yusuf]

Well Double thank you to you then. :)

[amarlaksh]

good write. Loved it!!

[yusuf]

Thank You so much! I am glad by your visit!