Mom and Moon.

"O Powerful Moon! Thou be the the second idyllic sight thine eyes hast ever drank. Swift down sometimes to kindle thy soul to eternal bliss with thy parlance of silence. Slumber thy mind to the same lullaby that dearest mother used to sing in thy name. Thou were beautiful then thou be beautiful now but never most than her! If thou hast divine omnipotence keep thy mother always in a eternal bliss , I plead. . For she dearest to thy heart than any mortal , count me too!
O the greatest romancer! Thou be the the second idyllic sight thine eyes hast ever drank.."

Reviews

[khalid]

very nice similarity between mom and moon. each one sees mom even more shining than the moon or the sun. i loved how you have penned this.

[yusuf]

Thank You again Dear brother. I am glad that you visited. Keep Visiting. :)

[ganga ramesh]

I loved the styling of your poem, Yusuf....great write and i love your " she dearest to thy heart than any mortal" line (don't know why i loved it)...great write:)

[yusuf]

Hi my dear fellow poet, I am much glad that you enjoyed it. Many thanks. :)

[ganga ramesh]

welcome:)

[Leslie Philibert]

Very rich, written with a selected neo Romantic style, might be better in this case to put it into a standard poem form, maybe quatrains,but a write of quality..

[yusuf]

Thank You So Much Sir. :)

[Sami Khalil]

A good write and magical. I really enjoyed the read...

[yusuf]

Thank You Sir. :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...My pleasure...:)

[Pradeep Nair]

Great job...
imagination take wings..

[yusuf]

Thank You so Much Sir. :)

[Abdur Raqeeb]

Fantastic Imagery. Seems like you have a fascination for moon gazing like me. Great Work!

[yusuf]

Thank You So Much brother! hahah Oh yes! I love moon and i always get so affected by it! At full moon i am always like telling my friends , `` look man! it`s beautiful`` and they are like chup re yaar paka mat! :P hahahha.

[Tiffany Kelley]

Have you been invading my mind while I am moon gazing? It feels like it! You mastered this poem with such a great deal of imagery. I absolutely love your Old English references. YUSUF -- You have intrigued me yet again. How do you plead?

[yusuf]

Thank You so much! Your words made me smile profusely! I am glad that you took a visit! And i like your picture it`s laden with cuteness! :)

[Tiffany Kelley]

Your words are guilty of making ME smile profusely! I am glad I took a visit as well. And in regards to my picture, you are ever so sweet! Xx

[yusuf]

hahaha. :)

[luviva]

ohhhh this is so good! great wite and the thyme was just spot on!!

[yusuf]

Thank You so much!

[DrD]

Old English or Biblical, this type of English is difficult to master and use throughout a work without falling back into some modern phrase. You have done that in most parts of the work with the exception of "used to" which is modern in place of "once" that is Old English. An interesting work, however, well worth the read and enjoyable at the same time.

[yusuf]

I agree sir! Thank You so much for taking out time to read my work! I am always honored by your visit!