Shot Gun!

Shot Gun!

A Story by yusuf

An old decay-tainted room, Comprising of rugged furniture, empty bottles, beer cans overuse trash-can and a ‘’filthy’’ giant bed. The walls of the room painted with cracks, making patterns with faded patches of paint on it. An ancient old clock on the wall, which rang with the hours. The cement floor of the room had cracks all over it.

It was situated in the bewildered outskirts of the’’ Tinsel town.’’ The window pane of the room was blanketed with dust and rust at the same time. The room was decorated with consumed cigar buds lying on the floor , scattered weed on the old table , overstuffed ash-trays and steaks on the dinning table. The room was completely stuffed with the smell of liquor , smoke , weed , rotten food and ‘’Lust!’’

She could barely see a thing from her clueless numb eyes. she was completely wasted. ‘’Her heart was beating miles away for her brain to comprehend’’. She was moaning and groaning playing in the lap of ‘’beautiful Agony ‘’ for ‘’pure delight’’. She held her hair up-tight with one hand while using the other to gallop.
Beast like men , all around her ‘’scrutinizing’’ every inch of her body. They were biting her thighs like hungry mongrels , and she could feel the ‘’pleasure’’ in her veins running berserk. she took them all with everything she had , and also she took everything they gave.

They were laughing while she screamed , her screams were rejoicing to them and it embolden them to ‘’refill’’ her with their ‘’poison’’. she smiled back and laughed ‘’hysterically’’ while they did all that they wanted. Revolting against her body she was ‘’begging’’ for more and more. She seemed happy. She was looking through her ‘’dizzy’’ eyes into the core of their ‘’savage’’ eyes , like a succubus , while they were striving to feel her all over themselves.

Outside , The moon was at its peak with a clear sky. A mystic silence was scattered all over the wild pastures. The moaning and groaning sound of the room could be heard in the woods amalgamated with all the chirping of insects and howling of animals. The ancient old clock in the room was ‘’constantly’’ ticking , it rang several times at several hours but the sound got lost in all the noises of the room , passing ‘’unheard’’ by the girl and the men. ‘’Tick Tock Tick Tock’’ the clock didn't stop ,and so did them but by the array of night , the beast were tired and were moving into a lethargic rhythm. After a while the moon lost its peak , the chirping faded away ,the howling had stopped , the darkness of the night was slowly getting pierced by the pollen of morning. Inside the room , it was all quiet now ,all stationary , nothing was in ‘’motion’’ except the ‘’ticking clock’’. The smell of the old decay-tainted room was still ‘’fresh’’ and suffused in the room , the main door of the room was half closed marking the ‘’recent departure’’ of the ‘’noisy guests’’!

Apparently’’ Tinsel town’’ was a Smile-laced town , On a fine morning , children running by the streets to their school , with a joyous smile on their face could be seen , people greeting each other with big giant hugs could be encountered and what also could be seen was the kissing of passionate lovers , painting the town red! 

By the last lane of the town , A dark-skinned handsome old man ,an retired Army officer was crying while his wife , a beautiful respected wife , was moaning profusely after finding her daughter unconscious and naked in front of their door. The old shattered father wrapped her body in a blanket and carried the girl to her room and laid her on bed. 

Their maiden daughter , blanched of her suave soul , was lying in front of them , on her pink bed , which she demanded on her last birthday. The bed sheet on her bed , had cute patterns of teddy bears drawn on it. Her school bag was kept at the stool just by the bed , and all her toys were lying in the closet , just in front of where she was lying.

The old couple kept on crying for an hour , and her daughter regained her consciousness . She remained silent for couple of minutes and then in a confused and numb manner she hysterically asked her father , ''Daddy What happen to me '' ? 

Gossip-glutton neighbors and onlookers were gathered outside the shut door of her room, and were all ears to get the scoop of how she was kidnapped, drugged, gang-raped, and then thrown back away, naked in front of her house gate. All that the Gossip-glutton neighbor and onlookers were able to hear were the screams of the girl`s s ghoul mother, mixed with the cry of her child , and the silent breakdown of the father .

The cry and screams were coming out of the rooms for one hour straight and then suddenly it all got quiet. Just when the Flux of onlookers started to wonder about the silence, a shot gun fired was heard twice followed by a horrible ear piercing cry of the shattered father, that took all the onlookers petrified, the cry was more of as the father is trying to shout his agony at his loudest pitch, and then a shot gun fired was heard again!

© 2012 yusuf


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love. it.

thank you for the read request.

shelving this one.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Powerful story you have writtern here yusuf. The intesity you captured never allowed me to look away, or even take a swig from my beer. That isn't easy to do. I loved the line: ‘’Her heart was beating miles away for her brain to comprehend.’’ I knew exactly what you meant. I'm a sucker for impeccable details. Great work yusuf. I'm looking forward to what you write next and will check out your other selections! Cheers!

LB

Posted 12 Years Ago


yusuf

12 Years Ago

hahaha Thanks man! Your words made me smile! I am so much obliged that you took out time to read it .. read more
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Within this writing the descriptive quality is no less than excellent. The few errors that one can find can be attributed to the fact that English is not your native language but the story moves nicely and the use of adjectives is marvelous. A marvelous effort and I would urge you to continue

Posted 12 Years Ago


yusuf

12 Years Ago

Sir i am so much grateful that you reviewed my work. This was my first venture with the pen , toward.. read more
tragic end...
but very good plot.
story of today...
It makes my eyes wet..

Her heart was beating miles away for her brain to comprehend---> The pain.
Every girl child is haunted by the beasts in the form of man.
cant say anything more..

Yusuf, my dear friend.... Keep this flame alive..
One day you will make it atop.




Posted 12 Years Ago


yusuf

12 Years Ago

Thank You So Much Sir, for your confidence in me! You don't even know ho much it means to me! I am s.. read more
Pradeep Nair

12 Years Ago

Dear Yusuf...

I never wrote stories. Whatever i said was the ffelings directly from m.. read more
yusuf

12 Years Ago

I am obliged! :)
beautifully written story :) i love it :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


yusuf

12 Years Ago

Thank You. :)
Yusuf, this is just so tragic! I had tears reading this piece. Especially about the bed-sheet. Very heartrending and haunting! You sure have it in you to sketch a thrilling story. No dull moment and i was captivated till the end.

Please also give us happy endings coz I know you can. Regards, Thinking..

Posted 12 Years Ago


yusuf

12 Years Ago

Thank You lady! Thank You for your kind words slashed onboard here. Your Confidence in me is pretty .. read more

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