Introduction

I always get these ideas in my head creating things in my mind when I'm alone or thinking about stuff or life in general. Sometimes my imagination goes crazy, people look at me and may think this girl is weird or why is she smiling? They always ask me what I'm smiling about, and my reply would always be "it takes to much energy to brood and be mad or angry all the time¨
You probably think I'm always a "happy go lucky person" but I'm not. I'm just like everyone else. A normal human being or what your definition of normal is. Let me tell more about myself. I'm a 23 year old, with no job (urgh) I quit my previous job, but that's a story for another time too complicated to explain. I love to read, write and being creative; I remember when I was little that I cried and begged my mom to get me a library card (How geeky is that!) But I love to read, it takes you a few minutes to go to another place and time and explore other places or people just to forget about your daily life and it's problems.
But enough of that. What else can I tell you? Oh Yeah! I have no love life, let me rephrase that! I have never had a Boyfriend. How pathetic is that! 23 years old and I never had a guy to call my own.
And that's why I'm telling my story because of my lack of love life. And how I accidentally created one for me. Like in Frankenstein’s boyfriend or human or whatever. Not out of peoples body parts (ewww) that's just crazy and messy. Don't get me wrong I'm not a crazy person! It happened by accident really it did! And it spinned my life out of control, you know like a tornado does where it destroys everything in it's path, but not in a bad way just in a crazy way if that makes sense. Oh! I forgot to tell you guys my name, it's Lilliana Rose Lucan. I have dark brown hair and brown eyes, I'm short or petite but look very young for my age. And the day all the mess began is ironically on the day that I went for a job interview. But...well actually the first day, but it's got alot to do with where I work. Well...you will see as my story goes on.

Reviews

[Eisho Shu]

This introduction is great. It really show Lilliana's personality as well as the possible setting. Though I do have to disagreed with Violet Stone a little bit. You give just enough information to make reader excited but also not too much. You can add more into this intro (Unless this is already an updated version) but I do not see the need for it. This introduction really make me want to know what her story is going to be like.

[yuriko]

Thanks so much :) You're right I didn't want to add to much and Violet is right too I wanted to add I little more detail but I wasn't sure. But I just also wanted to see what you the readers thought of it.And it helps me to think where I can improve.thanks for the review :)

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

This is a really good introduction for a good book. I will be reading this

[yuriko]

Thanks so much :)

[Violet Stone]

A great introduction, I am looking forward to hearing her story!

But a quick note if your open to criticism, if you want to grip people in a bit more, I would recommend putting a bit more detail into some things. I know your trying not to give away too much about the story yet but since its the intro, it might help lure readers in more.
For example, why was she so desperate to get a library card when she was little? Was she successful? If so, does she still have it now? Does she enjoy reading? etc.

Other than that, its great! You have got a real interesting story here and an original sounding plot. Cant wait to read more!

~ Sincerely, Violet Stone

[yuriko]

Thanks so much :) and I almost gave up on posting more chapters.But your review change my mind. I think about what you said

[Violet Stone]

Your very welcome! I'm happy I could help! You really have got some great potential for a story here so don't give up! You can do it :)

[yuriko]

Thanks for the encouragement :)