...while sadness lingers

Experimental. A touch dreamy. Finished abruptly/mid-thought..

In between mid nights 

washed with moon light,

I wondered then,

if sadness can be alluring.

But we are fooled, 

and there's nothing left,

or at least nothing,

of importance, except 

half- dreamed hallucinations 

and broken wings, 

while sadness lingers

upon her eye lids...

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

while sadness lingers
upon her eye lids

Moonlight is for romantics and lovers and here Dr Y, you have painted a picture of sadness with your words. There is emptiness here, that is touching. Expectations unfulfilled.

Your posted image is incredibly beautiful.

Chris

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I do feel a certain connection with the moon and can never get bored of writing moon poems.
Thank you so much for your lovely words here, Christine. Glad you appreciate. x

[Chris Shaw]

Moonlight, how can you not be lured by. Its beauty :)

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

This is emotional,
very well related piece.
When we sat tiredly,
feeling sleepy,
but still can't sleep.
eyes partly opened,
wearied by sadness.
watching moon overhead,
wishing all is well.

Well Expressed, Dr.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for appreciating and your words here, Kay. :)

[Ted Kniffen]

Indeed, sadness can be alluring...there is a melancholy to most good poetry...especially the romantics...of which your poem would fit the mold. Life experiences can produce a sadness that lingers and the eyes...since they are the windows to the soul...would reflect that.

Moonlight, perfect for lovers...not so bad for assassins.

A good write, Doc. A bit different for you, but certainly compelling.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ah, I suppose it's been a while since I wrote a dreamy piece, so it was nice to try this one ;)
read moreAh, I suppose it's been a while since I wrote a dreamy piece, so it was nice to try this one ;)
Thank you so much for appreciating and your words here, Ted. Glad you like it.

[Franco]

Oh what beauty! I can see the sadness in this poem. The artistic nature of it is just so moving. Thank you for writing such a vulnerable poem.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for appreciating, Franco. Glad you like it :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

there is such an emptiness to sadness...i do think it can be alluring, but unfortunately when the emptiness is whole...there may be nothing left of the heart to give.
a very sad, wistful write,
j.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I think so too...
Thank you so much for your words here, Jacob.

[Jibey]

Sad indeed, wistful words under the romantic moon... that promises but does not always deliver

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for your words here, Jibey. Always appreciated.