Impasse

Spontaneous write.

Impasse

Assuming conclusions,

overruling consumptions

dynamited love,

transforming the dynamics

of our relationship,

nullifying every chance we had

of reaching a safe harbor.

Somewhere

in the middle of arguments,

words were washed ashore,

and we found ourselves 

gazing at each other …

from the opposite ends 

of our defined spectrums.

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

In this is seems two people of similar hot temperament have ended up on a desert shore because they clash violently in words and deeds. The first stanza made me think (a good thing) and I am still unsure about its meaning and in particular the second line.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Yes, that is what this was about...ah, regarding that second line, I'm not particularly sure myself why I came up with it, but most of my writes are ramblings written off the top of the head so maybe I'll reconsider it...
Thank you so much for your review here, John. Glad it made you think.

[barleygirl]

This is one of the best heartbreak poems I've read in a long while. Your writing here has many similarities to the way Jacob writes about heartbreak, full of strong metaphors & with a withering resigned tone that gives a sense of irony. "Assuming" is an opening slap, since assumptions kill relationships. I love how you make it sound like this situation might've had promise, but the narrator believes most relationships will hit the rocks eventually! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'll admit I'm much inspired by Jacob's style of writing and perhaps that does show in this piece too. I'm glad you noticed that. Thank you so much for appreciating and your words here, BG. :)

[Robert Trakofler]

a separation of souls is never a pleasant thing and the way you painted it so succinctly is very nicely penned I do like the spectrum analogy here very clever. I have been in relationship where we rarely agreed and were able to be fine with this but over time with this are hearts lost connection.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

It does get tiring after a while, yes..
Thank you so much for reading and appreciating, Robert.

[LazerRays]

I guess sometimes tensions build up without talking and soon it becomes a sort of cold war just building up our ammo. Couples often take love as a battlefield trying to consume the other... Perhaps they might need to talk and sort out their differences and disarm their nuclear weapons. I like this yumna... A lot

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Love as a battlefield - I like that expression ;) and of course, you're right. All depends on how willing both are to save their relationship.
Thank you so much for reading and your thoughts, Ms. Poe. Always appreciated. x

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i have had relationships like this...harsh words cannot be taken back...once they are hurled, they land, they sting, they penetrate the skin and heart...and sooner or later, we part.
j.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Sadly, yes. They do sting hard...thanks so much for reading and your words, Jacob. Always appreciated.

[Relic]

As does and always will happen. I often hear that old saying - opposites attract. But often times those opposites wind up on the opposite side of the room. No river is completely smooth all the way I guess.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I agree..thanks so much for your words here, Tim. Always appreciated.