Tangled Webs

Inspired.

Tangled Webs

What are the odds

of capturing petalled dreams,

trapped between tangled 

webs of tomorrow;

we walk on parallel lines

of fate, which keep

lengthening,

beckoning us forward,

and our ever-eager souls

seek out where ends meet

into one...

what are the odds

of sleeping peacefully tonight,

yet another one spent 

aimlessly tossing around;

the winds stifle a laugh 

as they mark my skin.

Reviews

[Ted Kniffen]

What are the odds, that two people meant to be together will actually make it, or lose out again. There is a lot of angst here...a lot of what ifs...

Well written bit here, Doc and the last line is brilliant...with the right amount of ambiguity to throw a double entendre at the reader.

A good write.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm glad you felt that way, Ted. Thank you so much for your words here and for appreciating :)

[barleygirl]

This is how I've felt lately with a new friend poignantly on my mind. I love how this poem feels like a sister to the last short poem by you that I reviewed just before this. I know you will relate to this -- being a control freak (me), I want to orchestrate what unfolds in my life, but sometimes pleasant aspects spill forth so unexpectedly, such a situation tosses me around with mirth. That's the sensation your poem gets across too (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I like the way you took this piece. And yes, I'm certainly a control freak when it comes to things, and it always takes me by surprise when it doesn't go the way I want :x
Thank you so much for reading and your words here :)

[Moonie]

Even I feel inspired after reading this beautiful poem! I really liked that you started off with a question, spiked my curiousity. Capturing petalled dreams in the tangled webs conjures up such a pretty image.
Very nicely penned, indeed!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm humbled. Thank you so much for appreciating and your lovely words :-)))

[Kesha]

Wow this piece was absolutely stunning. I loved it. I myself have had many sleepless nights as of late. I can really relate to this. Wonderfully penned.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ah, Kesha! Thank you so much for reading and appreciating this one. Glad to see you around here :-)))

[Kesha]

You are very welcome! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A tangle web, if willing. Not a prison. A Black Widow web can be deadly for lover or not. I enjoyed your words and thoughts dear friend. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much, John. Glad you enjoyed :)

[Relic]

You're displaying a bit of your romantic side within each of these lines. You've trapped a bit of creativity within the web as well. Interesting poem, Dr.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Sometimes I do let my romantic side out a bit ;P
thanks so much for reading and appreciating, Tim. Glad to have you around :)

[Neville]

not tangled webs, tho beauty may be found therein, but rather wondrously woven dreams pon which to while away the night... nice one my friend.. very nice indeed, Neville :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for your words here and for appreciating, Nev :))

[Neville]

always a pleasure and true :)

[Jibey]

This is a beautifully crafted poem, wistful and delightful, expressing both hope and hopelessness, a sense of being adrift on a sea of uncertainties, with no chart to show the way to the harbour...

Are we simply the playthings of the gods? Maybe, maybe...

Is the tangled web we weave better than the lines thrown to us by Fate? Who knows?

[Dr. YumnaKay]

playthings - hmm, I've thought over it, maybe we are, or we simply twist our lives ourselves and maybe it's not as complicated as we make it out to be... too many questions which keep us hanging still...
Thanks so much for your insight here, Jibey. Always appreciated.

[Mrudula Rani]

Tangled web of thoughts that prolong tossing and turning through sleepless nights.
Life is in fact a journey on parallel lines, still... the presence of fellow traveler along that length makes all the difference. Lovely writing perfect in every sense. Your style is absolutely beautiful.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for the lovely review, Mrudula. I'm glad you appreciate :)

[An owl on the moon]

Beautifully agonizing in these transparent thoughts, the wishing, the wondering. The soul of your words reminded me of Serendipity, one of my favorite movies. How lives often pass, connect, and either wander apart or become in some ways tangled together forever. There are wishes here I hope find a way to awaken.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for your words here, Craig. I'll have to look into that movie then ;)
Appreciate you reading this one x

[An owl on the moon]

Only watch it if you like romantic comedies that are amazing and poignant. ;)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Oh, they're my second fav genre after mystery thrillers ;) so of course, I'm gonna watch it! :D

[An owl on the moon]

Haha! Then may you smile and laugh muchly! :D

[Richard🖌]

"Yee-DOGGIES!"
I'm really digging that picture Doctor Kay … a LOT! 🙃
And, to follow with a question is sheer brilliance in gripping the reader's interest right-off.
I'd say the odds are in your favor, should you decide as tomorrows come nearer and you find them as appealing as your yesterdays' imagined yearnings that propelled your desires, wants, and needs.
Still, in the realm of dreams, we seldom ever know … as revealed by aimless tossing and snickering winds.

You know my love for well-written Free Verse, and this is about as good as it gets.
Thanks for the delightfully poignant treat! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ah, I'm glad you like this free verse, Richard! I feel that's the only type I've gotten better at over the time and under your keen eye, of course :))
Thank you so much for the lovely review and your compliments. Always appreciate you reading :))

[Richard🖌]

(here's the full message that was cut short)
From your new avatar,
I see you've decided cocking a evil, suspicious eye is best … LOL!
Sighhh … for the day you become so wonderfully skilled at the Sonnet under my "keen eye". ;; )

[Richard🖌]

Actually,
Free Verse is not the only form you've written beautifully under my keen eye … don't discount or forget all your hard and dedicated work on the other forms we've worked on. You just need to use them every now and again, too, and not limit yourself to one or two forms, eh?
I always appreciate your sharings, too. : )