Night Terror

Just experimenting with prose and a bit of my darker side mashed together.

I struggled.

Every cell in my brain seemed to be straining. Trying to piece together the gaps, the holes in my memory which edged on each side of my head. 

I did not feel any sensation in my arms or my legs as I tried to move them off the bed, except for my heart, which was beating rather loudly, owing to the fact that it was unusually quiet around the house. I was jammed into the bed, as if glued, but of course I wasn't. I remembered going to bed the previous night, slightly earlier then I normally did. The book I'd been reading lay just inches away from my left hand; I had drifted to sleep while reading. 

The silence really got to me, creeping in slowly. I choked back spit and came to realize a bitter taste in the back of my mouth as I tried to speak. No voice. Just a croak, and even that died on my lips. A strange silvery figure appeared to be hovering, its face contorted into a ruthless smile as it bent over me...

To be continued...

Reviews

[alanwgraham]

Well Y, this has been a successful write for you although to me it looks not too experimental. It might be interesting to push out the boat a little. How about describing it through the eyes of the figure. Or perhaps all in internal monologue.
It does work well as it is tho.
Regards.
Alan

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I like your opinion about writing it from the other narrative and will try writing the next part that way. I mention experimental in most of my pieces, especially prose because I don't really consider myself a prose writer but I do like experimenting and expanding on my skills. I'm glad you appreciate, Alan. Thank you so much for reading and your thoughts here :)

[Neville]

No.. not the silvery figure... I've seen it and the black and golden figures hovering over me before now...

a good bit o prose indeed.... dont make it too scary, will ya...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I missed this review somehow :x sorry about that, Nev, but thanks so much for reading and your words here. Still have to continue on this one haha so I'll try not making it too scary ;P

[Neville]

no problem... twas my pleasure my friend and true... and a happy ending too, if ya dont mind...N

[...Relic...]

It's time to hide under the sheets. :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

:P haha probably! lol thanks so much for reading, Tim. :))

[Jibey]

Spooky... how the mind plays tricks on our consciousness... creating its own story from the mash-up in our brains.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

So it does..thanks so much for reading, Jibey.