A Tale ~ of Forbidden Love

Experimental. A challenge (?) or as close to it as I could get.

A Tale ~ of Forbidden Love

With smiles and laughs that tinted her cheeks,

she adorns this earth in beauty and grace.

With fingers that trail on notes to speak,

and music which fell right back in its place.

When winds sang songs of love in the air, 

hearts then rejoiced in each other's embrace.

Vanished abrupt, as if never there,

creases which danced between the forehead space.

In picturesque beauty like the night skies,

she walked, vowing to holy gods above,

stroking  scars unfaded on her thighs;

wrote 'pon stars, a tale ~ of forbidden love.  

Reviews

[Carthage Thorne| The Wi..]

This poem is a beautiful piece. Very well thought-out, the rhymes coincide together nicely and the poem overall has a very smooth rhythm to it. The picture chosen is nice as well as the imagery painted. Though overall the subtle implication of suicide (it seems) is there, and a sad thing to think on as to what this "forbidden love" could be.


Thanks for sharing, look forward to seeing more of your work.
~CarthageThorne

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for the lovely review, Carthage. I'm glad you appreciate. I do like how you perceived this piece, even though suicide wasn't what was on my mind while writing this one..

[Neville]

looks good, sounds good and my word, it is good........ N

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thanks so much, Nev! Glad you appreciate :-))

[Neville]

It was lovely my friend, very lovely indeed..

[An owl on the moon]

These words that flow from you here seem to come from ancient spaces. Thoughts of stars guiding the soul, awakening paths for the feet to now forbidden places, dark spaces of the life. It is a haunting beauty that is covered in scars, the survivor of pain still forging a place in this world. Profoundly moving, dear poet, dear friend.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for appreciating this one, Craig. Glad you were moved. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and thank you for the inspiration...i was in a writing zone when i read your piece and it inspired me to write one on love...will post in future.
i love reading poetry and finding that it triggers the fingers to move across the keys.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for both of your lovely reviews here, Jacob. Glad to have been an inspiration to you and most humbled too. :))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

nice rhyme scheme makes this flow so nicely...and the passion is felt in the song...

i always associate love with music....the two go hand in hand like a couple dancing in the moonlight.
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is wonderful. Filled with the energy and the drive of love. I had to read again. Thank you dear friend. You create a masterpiece.
Coyote

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for appreciating, John. Glad you like it :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I did enjoy and you are welcome my dear friend.