The image is interesting Dr Y, and your lines certainly convey a touch of horror. They speak to me almost of obsession where one party totally consumes the other. to the extent that they lose themselves altogether. I would say it was romance gone wrong. Well conveyed.
Chris
Posted 5 Years Ago
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5 Years Ago
I like your words here. There's indeed a fine line between obsession and love.
Glad you foun.. read moreI like your words here. There's indeed a fine line between obsession and love.
Glad you found this one interesting. Thank you so much for appreciating :)
beautiful my friend, beautiful... and in my opinion You finely painted what's a dream is like,
"suffocate you...
I cannot absorb all of you all at once;
only take you in, little-by-little"
those images just sent my mind into the dreams world, they give a perfect feeling to a dream, I didn't see Your poem as a real horror but a deeply sensual one, and when You sleep dreaming into that depth, You will have some deep mysterious feelings, and it will give You chills even after You wake up. Your first verse is gorgeous, I love it very much. You did great job here dear Yumna, perfect in all ways, well done my talented poetess, You always give me that feeling that You have so many words to say... and You better keep on wiring them down little by little :)
Posted 5 Years Ago
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5 Years Ago
Ah, it does have sensuality hidden under the waffle ;) your review here is beautiful too, dear frien.. read moreAh, it does have sensuality hidden under the waffle ;) your review here is beautiful too, dear friend. I find that I'm not often in control of my words..
Thank you so much for appreciating this one :))
Gorgeously rendered, Doc!
Beginning with the eye and appreciative art-catching picture choice, down through the font and color, excellently written moments of sheer image-laden emotion, metaphoric motion, and syntax smooth as silk speaking out to us in a message clear and concise, with punctuation and line-breaks spot-on … a fine, all-around presentation!
Super nice Free Versing, Poetess!
Then, how amazingly original you've poetically conveyed the sensations of being completely overwhelmed by another, whom has the kind of power that can steal the mind, heart, and soul away. Whew! I can virtually feel the sensations of being emptied and refilled by something far less than desirable and/or comfortable … almost demonic … certainly the epitome of a painfully debilitating experience!
It is so very exciting how you seem to flourish in skill and dimension with every write … I am so proud of you and impressed how you never give-up on your efforts and dedication to the art! : )
Kudos, Yumna -- you really stuck the ending, too!
I thank you most gratefully for another very enjoyable and entertaining piece from your very capable pen. ⁓ Richard
Posted 5 Years Ago
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5 Years Ago
Thank you so much for this lovely review and for appreciating, Richard. I'm humbled :)
The image is interesting Dr Y, and your lines certainly convey a touch of horror. They speak to me almost of obsession where one party totally consumes the other. to the extent that they lose themselves altogether. I would say it was romance gone wrong. Well conveyed.
Chris
Posted 5 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
5 Years Ago
I like your words here. There's indeed a fine line between obsession and love.
Glad you foun.. read moreI like your words here. There's indeed a fine line between obsession and love.
Glad you found this one interesting. Thank you so much for appreciating :)