Lost In A Maze of Thoughts

A fun write. Letting my imagination get the better of me. lol

This morning, while inspired 

by an urge to take

a walk, I crept out 

of bed, with the agony 

of washing my face 

on a cold December day.

Shivers went down 

my spine, but still

intent to have my lazy 

limbs stretch a bit,

I dragged my feet 

along the garden side.

Felt the grass on my 

tingling bare toes,

sniffed the air a little 

and amused myself

with butterflies taking turns 

on flowers all around.

Until I found myself 

peering through 

a bush from where 

blinked two black eyes.

Staring back, I tried 

hard not to blink...

But of course, I did...! 

Only to straighten up

and turned to find myself 

in a whole other world!

A maze, it was, with 

my wayward thoughts,

from a previous life, 

which drifted through the air

like tiny wisps of smoke, 

untouchable and beyond reach...

in search for ideas, 

I'd let my thoughts amiss. 

Before getting lost, 

in that maze of thoughts,

those soulless eyes 

from the garden bush,

gazed at me from 

the ground and I saw...

those were of a hideous rat 

chasing its stumpy tail!

That's when I realized, 

all along, wherever I went,

I'd been staring into 

my own dreary reflection...!

Author's Note

It's been a while since I wrote something light so it does seem a bit sketchy but oh well... :x

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

Don't know that I'd call this light. If light is the intention, you might want to tweak the ending. But, if not, it drifts rather handily into the dark. I might still rework it a little for grammar, flow, and clarity's sake -- not sure, but, they were those? or they belonged to? or something to that effect? You get my drift.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Oh, the dark part in the end was kinda intentional and in a way humorous, along the lines of me being a narcissist but I guess I got a bit carried away lol (december and winter afternoons + coffee does that to me ;P)
I do agree to your suggestion regarding the flow and grammar, also what you pointed out :x
Thank you so much for reading and your words, Lyn :))

[Lyn Anderson]

I like the dark twist. The turn surprised me as I took your "light" literally. Silly me.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

:D thanks again, I don't really have a dark humour side so it's fun exploring.
And not silly at all x

[Simone Davis]

I thought you did a great job, I know the feeling of being lost in thought, I loved the use of words and description.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

:D thank you so much for appreciating, my friend. Glad you like it :))