Lost In A Maze of Thoughts

A fun write. Letting my imagination get the better of me. lol

This morning, while inspired 

by an urge to take

a walk, I crept out 

of bed, with the agony 

of washing my face 

on a cold December day.

Shivers went down 

my spine, but still

intent to have my lazy 

limbs stretch a bit,

I dragged my feet 

along the garden side.

Felt the grass on my 

tingling bare toes,

sniffed the air a little 

and amused myself

with butterflies taking turns 

on flowers all around.

Until I found myself 

peering through 

a bush from where 

blinked two black eyes.

Staring back, I tried 

hard not to blink...

But of course, I did...! 

Only to straighten up

and turned to find myself 

in a whole other world!

A maze, it was, with 

my wayward thoughts,

from a previous life, 

which drifted through the air

like tiny wisps of smoke, 

untouchable and beyond reach...

in search for ideas, 

I'd let my thoughts amiss. 

Before getting lost, 

in that maze of thoughts,

those soulless eyes 

from the garden bush,

gazed at me from 

the ground and I saw...

those were of a hideous rat 

chasing its stumpy tail!

That's when I realized, 

all along, wherever I went,

I'd been staring into 

my own dreary reflection...!

Author's Note

It's been a while since I wrote something light so it does seem a bit sketchy but oh well... :x

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

Don't know that I'd call this light. If light is the intention, you might want to tweak the ending. But, if not, it drifts rather handily into the dark. I might still rework it a little for grammar, flow, and clarity's sake -- not sure, but, they were those? or they belonged to? or something to that effect? You get my drift.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Oh, the dark part in the end was kinda intentional and in a way humorous, along the lines of me being a narcissist but I guess I got a bit carried away lol (december and winter afternoons + coffee does that to me ;P)
I do agree to your suggestion regarding the flow and grammar, also what you pointed out :x
Thank you so much for reading and your words, Lyn :))

[Lyn Anderson]

I like the dark twist. The turn surprised me as I took your "light" literally. Silly me.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

:D thanks again, I don't really have a dark humour side so it's fun exploring.
And not silly at all x

[Samuel Robert Sands]

I seriously doubt you’re a rat

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

You being a narcissist is a bit silly Yumna but I really enjoyed this ballet of the butterfly...I can see you stark and lost...this tiny light shining as the butterfly leads you dancing through this crazed maze...at the end you awake back in the garden ...had it been all a dream....those beady black eyes tell you the truth of it...the emptiness of life....the pursuit of magical....

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ah, you're too kind, Queenie (but then you are the queen here ;P) I do think I'm a narcissist up to an extent...I like your interpretation btw. The emptiness of life indeed...
Thank you so much for your lovely words here. x

[Wild Rose]

Lost in a maze of thought ???
This reads a bit like my life just now
Just recently I have been in a maze of things to do
Thoughts of things to write just drift away
In a roundabout of fetch and carry; watch the food & turn down when if comes to a boil; what can I buy Aunt XYZ foe Christmas

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for reading and your words here :-)

[moog-drika]

That last twist definitely connected everything. Felt so relatable.
However it was a treat visualising the piece through your eyes.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for your lovely words here, m-d. Glad you appreciate. :)

[john l smith]

That Dec. walking in bare feet ain't really too neat and those butterflies must have been a surprise!
Is this comment about your dreary reflection the reason you have changed your picture? (lol)
An interesting garden walk
Dave

[Dr. YumnaKay]

haha probably! My last avatar was too cheery to go with this write lool
Thank you so much for reading and your words, Dave. Appreciated :)

[m3lody mae]

Such a long write but so well worth it, This is a very interesting write and so full of emotions, well written

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm not normally into longer writes but it was fun writing this one and def worth it for me as well. Thank you so much for appreciating :))

[An owl on the moon]

Smiling... loving every line! Thank you for taking us on this journey, creeping through worlds and wonderlands in search of sweet glimpses and dark reflections. Alice's adventures have always been some of my favorites, and your playful language reminds me of her, discovering the world is nothing as it might have seemed. Write on dear poet!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Glad to have you smiling over my words, dear friend. And yes, I think Alice's adventures were in the back of my mind while writing this one ;)
Thank you so much for appreciating, Craig. x

[An owl on the moon]

Ah, well I could certainly see you wandering into Wonderland one day... We'll have the tea ready for you. x

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Oh, so you'll be the Hatter ;) :P

[An owl on the moon]

You know it! I always was a bit mad. :D

[Dr. YumnaKay]

We're all the by-product of our (in)sanity. ;)
But oh, I always was a bit dreamy. :P

[An owl on the moon]

Yes, oh so true! Hoping you always find your path leading you down the rabbit hole to sweeter dreams. :P

[emmajoy]

You're quite an adventurer, aren't you? You're always prepared to diversify, go here or there on whims and brief what-have yous! This piece surprised me.. seems a mix of thoughts, 'light' and otherwise, a haphazard sort of journey, quite personal, lifting a corner of your often hidden silliness which is delightful! Congratulations for taking Yourself and me on a colourful ride on... a reflection in space!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

haha well, I guess I really let myself loose on the keyboard then ;P glad to have you surprised over this one, Em ;) Thank you so much for reading and appreciating this silliness :)))

[emmajoy]

Letting loose is flying to the moon wearing little but hope, apparently!! :)

[CyranoDBergeron]

Mmm, so you connected with something even though you didnt want to lol, funny.

We are all connected regardless of our mental concepts of the "Other". The rat is no less than us.

Anyways Really pleasant and well flowing. You are skillful

[Dr. YumnaKay]

True that. Thank you so much for reading and appreciating :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Wonderful story shared dear friend. The maze of thoughts can make us see and believe in some mystery and wonder. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for appreciating this one, John :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I did enjoy and you are welcome my friend.