Around The Crinkle of Your Eyes

A little different from my previous writes (I think). Just a touch sensual.

The afternoon glows, vibrant,

coursing through my veins

in strange colours

and when last night seems

forever ago, I ache

for a night that never was.

And days on end drag,

dull, itching themselves

to make way for the night

where you are no longer

a mere passer-by of

my reveries

when you touch me

with your words in

places that never were.

I would make a home

around the crinkle

of your eyes; a home

that never was.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I like the way this is stated with a touch of ambivalence, right in the middle of longing. This narrator does not feel "all in" but he/she could be persuaded I'm guessing. I love the crinkle you write about & it kills me when people think that crinkles must be banished! *smile* Fondly, Margie

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I like your thoughts, although I'd say the narrator is very much persuaded already ;)
And oh, I'm kinda envious of the people who have those crinkles! But then I rarely laugh to have any :x
Thank you so much for appreciating, BG :)))

[barleygirl]

I didn't laugh most of my life. Getting old has been the most hilarious my life has been! *wink! wink!*

[Dr. YumnaKay]

In as much as I love life and everything in it, I don't see myself living up to an older age like you :x I think you're admirable in that regard though *hugs

[barleygirl]

I can read between the lines . . . of course you're going to do this with much more dignity, I'm sure! *smile*

[Neville]

more than just a touch, more than just sensual... this is a full on literary embrace.... x

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That's what it was meant to be, under the waffle. Words can only do so much...
Thank you so much for appreciating, Neville. x

[Neville]

there was no waffle.. it was a passionate feast.. or at least the starter... N

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Sorry, that was me...I ate the waffle...literally 46 seconds ago and it was Yummy Kay! (wink)

[Neville]

I just knew you were close by.. just didn't know how close, bye...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ah my name always gets turned like that lol waffles are nice anyway though ;)

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Because your words and thoughts are YUMMY! I always get this scent and taste of flavoured lip gloss when I read you...its odd but scrumptious!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

:D I'm glad to have that effect. But writers like you here inspire me so much! Thanks again x

[Jibey]

I love the warm feeling of this beautiful poem... the longing and the desire, the sadness of the impossible triumphing over imagination's dreams...

If only 'never was' could be deleted.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for feeling this write, Jibey. I'm glad you appreciate :)