An Epitome of Sadness

Random scribbles. Spontaneous write.

An Epitome of Sadness  

I would hold you there, quietly,

silent. And yet, you'll slither

around the edges (still).

I would hold you there,

between the maroonish blues

of my lips, slightly parted.

While you sleep, my

mind weaves and

weaves images and I,

ever coward, run a shaking

hand over my eyes,

as if momentary relief

of not seeing has anything

to do with avoiding what's

yet to come...

but I would hold you there, quietly, 

silent, in the topmost 

shelf of my heart (reserved

for you) until it swells;

I, an epitome

of sadness (still).

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my!!!!! well done Doc!!! i am slowly roped, weighted and drown ... the sad melancholy scene is well captured ... the "knowing" ... "holding on" ... and the inevitable all add up to "An Epitome of Sadness" ... and done spontaneously!!!!! i think this is a special keeper my friend .. pure inspiration!! well done!
E.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Your review made me smile, Einstein. Thank you so much for appreciating and your lovely words. :))

[Neville]

what we have here is a nigh on perfectly penned bit of poetry and no messing.. wish I could write as randomly.... N

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for the lovely compliment, Neville. Appreciated :)

[Neville]

No problem truly enjoyed.. but hey.. ya can't get much more random than writing ya comments in another dear friends space.. in this case Mr. E Noodles space.... x

[Einstein Noodle]

hi Nev!! :)

[Neville]

Hiya mate.. how goes it today.. tis wet as wet here...:)

[Einstein Noodle]

it was raining a bit earlier ... i think we are to have a couple days of drying out now ... in the 40s ;)

[Neville]

blimey.. you get younger every day.. take care in that heat brother.. N

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahahahaha yes!!!!!! i'll go along with that!!!!! 40s it is today ;)))))))))))))))))))

[Neville]

Yeah.. 40 it is then.. for one day only eh..

[Ted Kniffen]

I quite like this, Doc. The style draws me in...the kind of writing that works best with a glass of wine in front of a fire, quietly reading...petting the dog and letting the words work their way through the evening.

A good write.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for your lovely words and for appreciating, Ted. Glad it made you feel this way :))

[barleygirl]

Sometimes nuanced writing is so opaque to me, I can't tell what the poet is conveying, even if well-crafted words still conjure up something good inside me as I read. This is some of your most nuanced writing I've read & yet I totally understand what you mean, even when you don't come right out & say it. The hesitance, the timidity, the dancing around a thing is part of your message . . . you express only a nuance, a hint of a thing becuz you leave the possibilities dancing out there for us to pick up on or not. This is my favorite kind of nuanced writing (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I usually don't go for complicated write ups and tend to make them simpler, except for the lay outs, although I do like keeping my pieces open for possibilities ;)
Your reviews actually help me understand my way of writing and the ways I can alter them. Always grateful to have you as a constant reader, BG. Thank you so much for appreciating. Hugs back

[barleygirl]

I often do not see my own stuff clearly until other people have made comments . . .

[lightsong]

haunting, beautifully, profoundly, sadly and sensually haunting, You always darw the emotions as deep, real and true as they must be, make us live each moments of Yours as real as it is, totally magnificent!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I do try, although emotions are not really what I work best with...I'm glad you felt this one, Light. Thank you so much for the lovely words. 💜

[lightsong]

"emotions are not really what I work best with"?!? oh believe me You work the BEST with ^‿^

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ah, you're too kind. I might believe it one day ;) :P

[lightsong]

You must believe it, it's true.

[Onlyme]

Great poem Dr Yumnakay. hits the sadness spot on.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for appreciating, Dawn. Hope you've been well. x

[Onlyme]

My pleasure Dr. Yunmakay. Not to bad thanks. Hope your good too. x

[ms. barrie]

this beautifully paints a vivid portrait of those times when sorrow becomes an uninvited guest that makes itself too comfortable for the soul.

fantastic use of metaphoric sensitivity you’ve incorporated that just lingers...not to mention the
pleasing fluidity you weaved
throughout this poetic gem

~ thank you for the read ~ x

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for the lovely words, ms. barrie. Glad you appreciate x

[ms. barrie]

you’re welcome, was a pleasure :)

[Kesha]

Wow this is simply wonderful... A somber and almost peaceful write.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for your lovely words, Kesha. Glad to have you around :))

[Jibey]

This has a haunting sweetness and sadness, as though love is a duty while the mind searches and returns unsatisfied. Sometimes we are there, but not there, captured but not captivated.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You do capture the feeling here. Thank you so much for your words, Jibey. Always appreciated.

[Quill]

with time sadness shall pass

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for your words here and for reading.