Sillage....

Mollietta. Experimental.

Sillage....

'Twas on one lonely night,

with pearl-white haze,

I stroked the paper

in weariest daze;

my heart still drooped 

with the weight of it all,

whilst my fingers bled tears

in un-writ scrawl.

'Would my future soon

blur and fade,' as I feared?

Outside the window,

blinding light appeared.

There, in a trance, I watched ...

no breath to spare;

'twere fireflies, bright,  

flickering through the air.

'Awaken, O dreamer!'

the moon then sung;

the scent of perfume

lingered 'pon my tongue....

Author's Note

"Mollietta"
An original form created by Mollie Reckitt, from Ely, Cambridgeshire, United Kingdom, in 2013.
Rules:
No limit to number of verses, with a five verse minimum, each verse has twenty-syllables in any configuration, rhyming is author's choice.

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Such a silky smooth write, following rules re. form and all, but full of colour and meaning. Lovely, Yumna, and yet again, proof of your skill as a poet-witer. Reading a second time, this piece really moves me, it has an ethereal air to it.. suits you perhaps, more than.. ..

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ah, I'm trying more often not to lose my real voice while I attempt to write in strict poetic forms, so I'm glad you think so, Emma. Thank you so much for your lovely words x

[Richard🖌]

My-my-MY!
Is there anything you can't do!
Yumna,
This is as wonderfully brilliant as it gets … your syntax, flow, and metaphorical imagery make for a truly masterful piece of poetic excellence any poet of note would be proud to claim as their own, including Me.
The presentation alone is poetry to the mind's-eye, but the sweet sillage of beauty and emotion of your skillful writing lingers-on in the tasteful bouquet of its enthralling appeal.

My deepest bow to thee! ⁓ Richard : )

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You always leave me such lovely reviews, Richard! Thanks so much for appreciating and for the inspiration, of course. :D

[Richard🖌]

Always, it's a true pleasure, Yumna. : )

[CD Campbell]

Wonderful poem. Not familiar with the format, but the use of archaic language could make it fit in to any time in the last two hundred years. Great job.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That's a great compliment. Thank you so much for appreciating, C :))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

perfume upon the tongue, but no words upon the page...
another lonely night turns to a lonely morning...frustration of not being able to share the hours with the muse.
j.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Perfectly summarized. Thank you so much for your words here, Jacob :)

[heavenscentgirl1]

A very nicely written & presented Mollietta YummaKay, I enjoyed it very much.
Your Mentor’s touch shows throughout this one - well done, and keep writing.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for appreciating. I'm glad you enjoyed :))

[Vivian Gospel]

This is seriously cutting edge stuff dr yumna. Very crafty you ar.e

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'll take that crafty as a compliment ;P thanks so much for reading, Vivian :)

[Vivian Gospel]

Crafty in this case yes