Blessings ~ In Disguise

Parabolic Quatrain. Experimental.

                    

  

                                                   

 

Blessings ~ In Disguise
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              In solitude ~ beneath vast sky,
                 rippled water unto me, called.
                    I washed away my tears near dry,
                        as, soon, the ocean waves, too, stalled.

                            My pale-blue, shivering lips sighed,
                              'Oh, what mysteries life unfolds...'
                                 the summer breeze smiled in its stride,
                                    warm as could, tingled my skin cold.

                                      While brushed across a rainbow arc,
                                       shining bright with so soft a grace,
                                      upon earth it left a dimpled mark;
                                      all else seemed to fall ~ back in place.

                                     As sudden, life's curtains were drawn;
                                   a frightening, yet, wonderful
                                  thoughts plethora'd, beckoned new dawn;
                               enticed, could not ignore such pull.

                         A colourless canvas before
                     splattered with paint; my eager eyes
                   grazed the sky for winter galore ...
               what's unknown ~ blessings in disguise.  

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Author's Note

"Parabolic Quatrain"
(An original form by Richard Jenkins)
Rhyme Scheme: abab, etc.
Syllable Count: 8
As many verses as desired.

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

if i am reading this right...she stands ready to give up her life to the waves but has a moment of realization ...and the brand new day is waiting for her painters' hand to make of it what it can ... regardless whether correct or not...that is what i draw from this...the form suites you i think and i love the shout out you give to Richard in shaping a curve ... that and the color is pleasing just to look at
rhymes and rhythm ae natural and easy ..even the " plethora'd," line ;) the word is perfect says i! i feel the lonliness of your speakers heart ..and the sense of tragedy to come in her pale blue lips .. an optimist .. i am grateful she seems to have chosen one more incredible and present day living :)))))))) in case you can not tell...sure enjoyed the read and a beautiful emotive scene given
E.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I love your analysis of this piece. I did try this form as an experiment but yes, Richard is a great inspiration for me :))
Thank you so much for your praise and for enjoying, Einstein. Glad you enjoyed 😊

[Ken Simm.]

A lovely piece of romance with a melancholy colouring.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ahh, just saw this...! Thank you so much for appreciating, Ken :)

[Avelina Devi]

This is absolutely gorgeous! Beautifully penned.
Reminds me of Lord Byron's poetry. If words could paint would make a lovely canvas.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for your lovely words and for appreciating. Glad you like it :)

[Richard🖌]

Goodness, Doc!
It's as though you've matched the gentle curve of surf washing softly ashore upon the beach … and, what tender sentiments your perfect meter and rhymes flow from your mind and heart, through your words, deep into our own.
Sweet mystery in metaphoric splendor gravitates throughout the fiber of our senses, rising-up to embrace the lush romantic warmth within our blood.
And, your soothing color and picture choices … muaahhh* Magnifique!

"Stunning imagery!"
While brushed across a rainbow arc,
shining bright with so soft a grace,
upon earth it left a dimpled mark;
all else seemed to fall ~ back in place.

Is there a form, Yumna, you cannot learn and excel in to captivate and entertain us with, so beautifully?
I've, yet, to find one … though, the Sonnet awaits!
Gorgeous work, Dear Lady-Poet … KUDOS, I love it! ⁓ Richard 🏝

[Dr. YumnaKay]

:D you're kind, Richard. I do intend to try the Sonnet soon (hopefully before this year ends:)) I just want to try that Mollietta form I read of yours and so far, it seems kinda challenging or I'm just out of words :/
Thank you so much for your extraordinary praise and for helping me out with this one. Truly appreciated :)

[Richard🖌]

I suppose I am kind, Yumna,
But, far more than that, I am honest and observant. ; )
Well, if you need a hand with the Mollietta, you know where I am.

You're welcome, and I thank You, as-well! ⁓ Richard

[Dr. YumnaKay]

:p of course haha, you're in for a long time of me nagging you to teach! ;)

[Richard🖌]

I could not be more pleased, Yumna,
You're a most wonderful student, in all ways an olde teacher could hope for. : )

[An owl on the moon]

How I love the curve of your shoreline... waves of words so eloquently washing over the mind and heart. The picture is gorgeous and your thoughts are divine. There is both the pain of tears and the cleansing of seasons in your soul, and those blessings, ever so hidden, waiting to be discovered. May it be, dear poet.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for the lovely words and appreciation, Craig. Glad you like it x

[Coyote Poetry]

Heavy, wonderful and deep thoughts shared. Life is like the seasons. Can't be stopped. We learn to accept. Artwork and words were amazing my friend.
Coyote

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for appreciating, John. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I did enjoy and you are welcome my dear friend.

[Vivian Gospel]

This is such a cool form by the way. I find it surreal and laden with sensuality.
Impressive kay.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

When I read Richard's poem in this form, I knew I had to try it too. :D thank you so much for appreciating, Vivian. :))

[Vivian Gospel]

Richard attenborough?

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Eeh no, Richard is a poet on this site. Dk if you've come across him yet but he sure is the one to look for if you want to learn poetic forms. Js. ;)

[Vivian Gospel]

Well... for me someone else is ny go to person for that... my muse.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Oh, I did not mean to say it like that. Although frankly, I consider myself my own muse. But it's different for everyone so ... :)

[Neville]

This is not just poetry, it is indeed art tho and as such, so does it both aesthetically and eloquently capture the many competencies of both wordsmith and artist... surely my favourite poem of your's to date, my friend... Neville

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That makes me smile. Glad to have this considered a favourite. Thank you so much for appreciating, Neville :-)

[Neville]

a most deserving poem and true..

[Najam Us Saher]

I am enchanted to read this wonderful poem. Well, this poem was a blessing in disguise for me to encounter reading this :)
Your words flowed effortlessly and so naturally like the rise and fall of the tide. Thank you so much for sharing this.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm glad you felt that way while reading. Thank you too for appreciating this piece, Najam :-)

[Najam Us Saher]

It was a pleasure reading this :)