Falling Victim To Her Prey ...

Continuation to my last story 'An Enigma ~ Unresolved". Will be editing later still.

Clunk. Clunk. Clunk... the footsteps echoed as the hooded figure moved down the pitch-black corridor. The shadow kept growing bigger as she walked in the dim light. 

Not a single mistake so far. She had played her game well. But still, there's so much to do! The creature inside her roared his displeasure and flexed his claws. She could almost feel the claws ravaging her, yet it felt like a caress to her. Just a moment, she cooed lovingly to the beast. 

As she reached the end of the corridor, her breath caught between her lips and she stopped dead in her tracks. For there, at the far end of the other side, stood the most beautiful man she'd ever laid her eyes on. His dark hair fell in curls covering his forehead, his eyes glinting in the dark. 

Prey, the beast growled. She smiled ruefully, and cocked her head to one side. Prey indeed. Such a waste... 

Perhaps she could toy along for a little before she revealed her true intention. As they say, it's never too good to play with your food, but that was her food. The fear, the challenge, the anticipation of triumph, it made her mouth salivate already. 

Be patient, dearest. She soothed the creature once again and resumed walking to the other side. Her approaching footsteps made the would-be-victim turn up his head. A while ago, he seemed lost in thoughts, and now, it seemed he had regained his sight. He could see nothing but her floating towards her. Good, he's already fallen. She felt the creature lash suddenly. 

As their eyes met, it took her a split second to make the decision that she'd be keeping him for a while longer than she had intended. The creature was furious now. Has the mesmerizer been mesmerized herself this time? That phrase was mocking her now. She was torn between two choices. To satisfy the beast or to satiate her own thirst. It seemed the latter would win this time. 

She was, after all, the true master of herself ...

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to be continued. 

Author's Note

Constructive criticism on improvement welcome :-)

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Gulp! Seems whatever you write these days, you take a prize portion of applause with you, adopted neice! Your language in this is downright feisty, downright naughty and - put in such a way I'm glad it's near Sunday!

'Prey, the beast growled. She smiled ruefully, and cocked her head to one side. Prey indeed. Such a waste... ' Laughing here,it must be due to the steamy weather over there., Whereas all we have is drizzle right now.. so, please share! :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Well, an applause from you is more than good for me :D I'm glad the feistiness has carried through, that was intended. ;) It's Sunday still haha
And yes, the weather conditions here are gonna be extreme so I'll probably be writing along the same lines ;P
Thank you so much for your words and for appreciating, Em xx

[emmajoy]

It's fascinating to see how your Words' adventure, Yumna, they take so many route! x (Beware that heat.. )

[Coyote Poetry]

You are a amazing story teller my friend. I liked the places and the honest tone of the story.
"She was torn between two choices. To satisfy the beast or to satiate her own thirst. It seemed the latter would win this time."
The above lines. Wide open ending, I liked it. Thank you for sharing the amazing chapter.
Coyote

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm glad you like it. Thank you so much for the compliment. I'm humbled.

[Coyote Poetry]

I did you enjoy and you are welcome my friend.

[john l smith]

I see her as a difficult date
Quite likely a last date
Great atmosphere
John

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I have yet to write the ending to this one but probably ;)
thanks so much for reading. Appreciated :)

[john l smith]

will stay tuned............

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Oh, you aim to tease...I am so pleased ( wicked laugh)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

:D haha this made me laugh! I'm probably the teaser of hearts then lool thanks so much for reading, Queenie :))

[Ardra]

Reminds me of my poem.... the midnight desire or something...in which she falls for her prey....
Quiet nicely done Yumna the build up and the feel....and with upcoming Halloween sounds just apt... :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'll have to check out that piece of yours then ;)
Thank you so much for reading and appreciating this one, Ardra. :)

[Ardra]

Ah you had long time back.... :)) very long time....

[Chris Shaw]

Keeps the reader's attention, the story is gripping and well written Dr Y.

Chris

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm glad it has kept your attention so far, Christine. Thank you so much for liking. :))

[angel]

Very nice, and I look forward to the continuation; just one tiny thing I noticed. The word caress has only one r.
Good story, though, and it keeps your attention.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

grr yeah I noticed that error and corrected it. Thanks so much for the heads up, my friend. You really are an angel :D I'm glad you like it :))

[Jibey]

The psychology of the beast, the appetite, the thirst strike a profound chord in the readers... as is clear from the reviews so far. I think Auntie Emmajoy may need to enter the confessional tomorrow :-)

It is true that anticipation is often more stirring that completion... and you certainly know about suspense and arousal... The next stage will be hard to handle... as it were 😉

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ah, I think I've dwelled too much in suspense to try it out myself ;) the next stage is always the hardest lol
Thanks so much for your review here, Jibey. Your words made me smile. :)

[LazerRays]

So does she eat people? Becuase it's in my head that she gobbles up people like yummy ice cream ;)
:D

very nice my friend, I do like the setting. You put a lot of detail into it. That's pretty important to me. I'm hooked. :3

[Dr. YumnaKay]

lol you little .... I doubt if men taste as good as yummy ice cream hahahah but nah, she's not eating 'em. It's much more intense than that. I could tell you but that would take the fun away ;P
Thank you so much, Sarah. I'm glad you like the details. I did try to work on that. :)

[barleygirl]

Nice set-up for your upcoming toe-to-toe contest . . . I love the way you slowly lay out the scene in vivid glimpses, dripping with attitude. To me psychological thrillers are much more intriguing than outright blood & guts (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I've always been taken with psychological thrillers, only a bit afraid to try this genre myself. Thank you so much for the boost up, BG! I'm glad you're liking it so far :D Hugs back